magic on the water

magic on the water

the sea's the sky's daughter

the sky for the sea

the sea's the sky's riot

turning into wind

the still air trying

madness at sea 

the wind blows it in

madness at sea

madness wins

Reviews

[...]

. oh, absolutely ... when we're at sea ... we experience madness ... it feels like we're lost ... and might never find our way back out of the riots again ... but i think if there's such beautiful poetry ... there's hope for all of us ... here's to hope ... may we never run out of it ... and here's to your beautiful poetry, paul ... may you never run out of it ...

[Emer]

sounds like an angry sea. But I like how you describe that the sea is the sky's daughter and that it is acting up. makes me think of a mother daughter relationship where the daughter throws a tantrum for her own way

[(Super) Heroes Never Di..]

I agree with Miss Coral. It took me another read to begin to understand what you are trying to write about, what with all the repetition.

[...]

madness is in
sanity is out
i am a gin
you are a lout

i am a gin who has wishes
but they don't come true
i am a gin without a gin
but you already knew

[Wondering Mind]

"the sea's the sky's daughter" and "the sea's the sky's riot" were brilliant phrases me thinks. Another wonderful write and a pleasure to read.

[Miss Coral]

The repetition is somewhat confusing at first, when my brains skips ahead and goes "Whaa?" But then I read it again, and actually concentrate (for once), and a picture forms, and it all makes sense.

Another wonderful write.

-Coral-

[Alicia Schroeder]

Awesom!!

[emmah]

oh the mania of endlessness - the endlessness of the sea - is as definitive of madness - as madness itself - and there's no denying the victor its due - and serah's right - as she is about all things - here's to the hope that is illuminated in your poetry!

[Ed Hart]

poetry is not the house of fiction

[Robin]

I have experienced the Seas fury and indeed it is the Sky's riot ..