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A Poem by paul

still air conspiring
to be wind


conspiring like the nighttime
to eliminate the day

conspiring like the nighttime
when the wind is away

© 2010 paul


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I love this. I love the clean, crisp images and the way it says just enough without overstaying its welcome. It's just one, perfect thought.

Posted 14 Years Ago


the sky is sullen
and the stars all quiet -
a new wind
was just born
and a new day
already on its way.

cycles and circles.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I love Sera's review! and your poem, of course.

Posted 14 Years Ago


well balanced write...loved the ending where the beginning began....an easy read...read it three times until the birds flew away with my mind ;)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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. oh ... i think the wind has no wind of these lovely pearls of wind poems that you find in the oyster of your heart ... else ... it would start writing poems to thank you ...

Posted 14 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

My title suggestion here would be: dead calm

This write provokes quite some dark feelings, but nonetheless longing for wind and for the sun...
Well done.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on September 20, 2010
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