titles are stupid...

love in the street

madness in the air

everywhere he goes

people stare

the stare at his madness

they stare at his day

they stare at his madness

until the moon

goes away

they stare at his madness

like the night fights

the day

they stare at his madness

until he goes away

the flowers fight gravity

the birds fly away

the flowers fight gravity

like the night fights the day

alone in the nighttime

alone in the day

flowers fight gravity

birds fly away

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

Really interesting piece- I love the repetition towards the end, where it changes focus. :)
Great write.

-Coral-

[Alicia Schroeder]

This is an awesome writting :)

[...]

his madness is endearing
and his madness is a balm
it's only his madness
that makes my madness calm

titles are stupid
people are dumb
when there's no cupid
the mind goes numb

[Lilly]

I knew I'd like this - just because the title made me smile...

But really - this is a lovely poem and the rhyme adds so much to the feel of this piece. Fantastic work.

[Wondering Mind]

Yet again, your genuine style is a wonderful read. Very clever, indeed.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Oh Paul..how clever are your writes..saying it all yet not saying anything at all.The repeating of the lines..'they stare at his madness',caught my attention particularly and also was very evocative for me...i related to how the world stares at me..i just get further lost in myself and move on..:)
Also flowers fight gravity..you have a skill to notice these subtle yet beautiful aspects of nature and you use it so effectively for your poems.

[emmah]

ah - this one hurt - it ached and ached - like endless hot tarmac - on bare feet - it blistered and yes, it hurt - and i swear i heard - the teardrop of that flower - its soul is safe - in the magic of your poetry, paul - its fight is captured - in the delicateness of your words - it sure is!

[Crinkle°]

I love, and happy that you've published new poems, it was too long since your last!

[alan peter kelly]

so then...all in all it's really quite a balanced affair yes? enjoyed the flow and the easy roll off the tongue and mind....

[Angel Bird]

My title would be: whispering madness...

This could end up as a song maybe in Heavy Metal or so.

It has so much to give this piece, it is so deep and revealing, and also very thought provoking. I truly like this one. Very well done.