why? do i have to write a title...

days walk by

nightimes day

wherever he goes

love goes away

everywhere his madness

even devils stay away

stay away like the sun

stay away like the day

Reviews

[emmah]

i heard clearly
the quiet decree
light had been banished
and i had to be.

but you never really know -
not with me.
i never follow rules.

how do you even do this - with such few words - paint a picture so real - that it is impossible - to not get drawn - straight into the scene!

ps: you don't - have to insert a title, dear one!

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

'wherever he goes,love goes away'..i just know how many times i have whispered those words to myself..but love has to be within us...for warmth of the sun,chill of cold wind collects on our skin.

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. i echo emmah ... how do you do this? ... with such few words ... and yet they flow like a river ... and the intensity you express ... ah, the poignant points of a painful journey ... but the devils don't stay away ... that's why emmah and i are here ... :) ...

[Crinkle°]

your title is great ;o)

[Emily B]

who needs titles all the time?

I'm a little guilty of neglecting the top line sometimes too

[Angel Bird]

I can't really explain why but my title here would be: hooded crow

I think this piece gives a nice glimpse into the writers being and feelings, but only the wrong loves go away - the real love will bump into you one day and the sun will go up and brightly shine on your soul ...
Good piece.