sky scrape

the skyscrapers scrape 

the sky but the sky

doesn't mind

it doesn't feel

any pain

unlike me

I'd mind.

Reviews

[Elizabeth]

I wonder, though... does it mind?
I would.

Love the absence of punctuation. I do that, too. Personal preference of mine in poetry. It seems to make the images flow without any forced stops or breaks.

This was refreshing... original. And that's rare around here.

[emmah]

ah - these are stellar lines - a singular thought - enchanting - honest - cutting - the only thing i wonder about - is if the sky really doesn't mind - even if it did - would we ever know? - makes me wonder where the rain comes from? - is it evaporation - or sky scrapers? - who deciphers the rain? - its outside my window right now - and i barely hear it - leave alone listen to it - i drown it in the sounds of snares and thoughts - its singing of something - i'm sure it is - is it singing of the scraping?

[Emily B]

sometimes I want to be up there
with the clouds
above the clouds
would I mind
rubbing elbows with the sky?
I hope the sky
wouldn't either . . .

[Crinkle°]

like usual I drink your words like a glass of fresh rosé or like a glass of whisky, it depends on how I feel, but guess what, it's always a very pleasant drunkenness.

[...]

. and why shouldn't you? ... you absolutely must ... with that amazingly poetic mind of yours ... that etches skill and thought on blank pages with a hesitant but heroic pen ... and i'm glad that they're unlike you ... because you are so unique ...

[.]

LOL...cute...your poetry makes me smile..how do you think of this stuff..oh to be inside your mind for moment :)