untitiled

I scour the depths of hell

for a way out

listening always

for that first sound of love

but the sound never comes

the rain never falls

here

the magic madness that drove me here

is all I know

all I know like

the end of time

is coming

lonely lasts much longer than love

words help with the fight

and the growing ocean

breeze

can't soothe

me

Reviews

[Elizabeth]

ah... lonely lasts much longer than love. Right in the stomach, that line.
I love the way you structure your work, maybe because it reminds me of the way I do mine. It makes sense... the flow is continuous.

The rain never falls
here

ouch

and the last line? perfect.

[...]

when the ocean breeze doesn't soothe
and caramel doesn't taste like caramel

the taste for life dies a cold death
and then not even tabasco can help

[Ry]

Beautiful =)
"lonely lasts much longer than love"

[Brad]

speaking of salves for the soul, bro, dis be it

[...]

. lonely lasts longer than love ... i'm stealing that one for my epitaph ... indeed words help with the fight ... beautiful words again ... and 'magic madness' echoes ... just like magic all by itself ... and madness accompanied by magic ... beautiful poetry, paul ... intense and exotic ... emms is nearly always right ...

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Yes sometimes the coolest of zephyrs can not soothe us..Paul this was very touching..

[emmah]

'lonely lasts much longer than love'

what a line - yes it does - but that moment of real love - the bitter, for real, stinging, hurting, dizzy kind of love - can make the lonely lifetime worth it - maybe it can - or maybe i'm a hopeless romantic - either way - you're a stellar poet - and your words - 'magic madness'!!!!

[Emily B]

your words are beautiful

always so beautiful