almost

i almost

want you

to break my heart

like a bottle

pulled by gravity

to its shattered resting place

I almost want you to break 

my heart

just to feel 

me scattered

in the street

my last hoorah

betrayed by gravity

I almost want the sun

to burn me

like a too close planet

desperate for love

I almost want to die

just to see

if I'll fly

away from here.

Reviews

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. anything to be able to feel again ... anything to not feel "comfortably numb" ... anything to predict ... anything to detect ... a hint ... a sign ... something ... anything ... but you have the whole universe of verse under your spell ... what a stunning piece of poetry, paul ... gets to the guts ...

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

wow!!!!!!!

[Crinkle°]

yeah you're right... weird as our writings are similar sometimes... a bit dark and sad... efficient.

[emmah]

- a sip of heaven - and a hellish breath of smoke - the earth spins on both - and in your words - it does - i almost know what it spins on

[Alicante lullaby]

simple words to address complex yearnings...a very paul write,Paul.

[David Morley]

Remarkable.
The lines keep the flow, keep the suspense, and the wording is perfect, the rhythm constant.

my last hoorah
betrayed by gravity

Luck.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Just to see if i will fly away from here..the last line sums it up Paul.Sometimes we know the flames are leaping yet we like the pain which comes with burning our fingers in it.

[Brad]

...and now i see why we get along...this was a beaut

[Ed Hart]

when i was a kid, we used to go the circus and watch frank (bring 'em back alive) buck make the lions and tigers jump through hoops...you can do the same thing with words

[Emily B]

I just realized how very visual your words are . . . I see the images of your short lines,they fall from the sky like the bottle pulled by gravity, I see the me scattered and the planet desperate for love . . . strange how vivid and real each image is.