interstellar love affairs

and now for the real purpose of the muse

to stand with me

for against

walls

and vast open spaces

to stand

like love

at the place

where the sun mingles

with the flowers

Reviews

[TAO]

The title brought me in... Did it mislead me, or did I, in trying to think too hard about this poem, misunderstand? Either way, the title is beautiful (for I live with my head, not in the clouds, but in the stars), and the poem itself is...calming. Where the sun mingles with the flowers... That has to be one of the single and most simplistically beautiful lines I've ever had the pleasure of reading, Sir. Very well done.

[Elizabeth]

How did I ever miss this one? "for against walls" 4 walls...intentional play on words? Knowing you, yes. "to stand like love" in the place of it - a reminder- a ghost, of sorts. This is lovely and the voice haunted. Another favorite.

[Marie Anzalone]

Yes, to see grace and truth in the ordinary, to create a buffer against the worst has to dish out. Yes, yes, yes. You nailed it.

[Dalebear]

Nice beautiful your poems inspire people.

[ettorney]

I have to agree with Jenniewren. Gorgeous is the right word to describe the last five lines.

However, to be honest and constructively critical, the first five don't work so well. They are not the prelude to the last five lines that they deserve. I can almost "see" your mind forming those concluding lines as you work your way through the beginning of the poem setting the stage, as it were, for the last five.

The poem reads like the opening scene of good tear jerker movie. You know, an out of focus, long pan downward (the first five lines) resolving into a clear romantic moment (the last five) where the sun mingles with the flowers.

Might I suggest, a bit brazenly, that you take those last five lines and do more with them? Use them as the basis for some truly inspired emotional imagery.

Nice Write.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

I think this is gorgeous..such a lovely lovely piece.All you aspire is to stretch out into spaces which are vast and not limiting...and you wish someone by your side to realize the same...

[Emily B]

the lyric and pastoral poems had their place, the rhymes of Emerson and Longfellow had their place, too . . . but the brief and concise and full of wonder, those are the poems I lose my heart to

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

i am such a huge fan of using less in a poem.. and this perfectly illustrates why.

those last 5 lines are gorgeous

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. you know too much ... you see too much ... you learn too fast ... and it's just magical ... all the way ...

[Alicante lullaby]

beautiful...your words are inspired...