mind

my mind obscures the street.

my eyes go blind with hunger.

i swim against the night.

Reviews

[Philip Muls]

Fascinating how you mix senses like seeing, thinking, being hungry in an atypical manner.

[Annie Gryphon]

it sounds like a vampyr, it's a bit scary, i could imagine a whole long story out of these few lines.

[Elizabeth]

There is the fresh air I was craving. I swim in the same current, I suppose.
Love.

[armin]

i swim against the night.

That particular line is the kicker in this short piece of poetry.

armin. ...

[Jimmy Yetts]

A clever bit of work.
Strong offering, Paul!

[J.R.H.]

Your poems are too short. They are skillful, but I want more!

[Ed Hart]

then that is your job, because our hungers cannot be allowed to infect the world, now that we see it...

if thy right hand offends thee...

[paul]

Thanks for the brilliant comments Ed.

[.]

~~ i need to learn how to swim against the night from you, coach...

[paul]

you're already the best swimmer i know ..

[.]

~~ ohhhhh... no, no... you're the best... but thank you for your kind words, coach... you are a gem...

[nazia]

I like the way you express things.. Crystal clear.. Nice write Paul :)

[paul]

Thank you!

[Jamestown]

Really nice piece!
Short and sweet well written
clear message, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!