In debris and ash

Some things cannot be avoided, even though you thought you could. But nevermind life is not plannable anyway so I guess it's not so bad.

I watched you burn

Suffering in debris

You watch me burn

And I try to flee

I watched you avert

In cardinal directions

You watch me avert

In circular sections

Haunted by the storm

Devastated by the flood

Tears are falling like a swarm

Except I am crying blood

Reviews

[studentinthecafe]

This is phenomenal! I was captivated with this from the first line and you really wrapped it up well. Perfect length also!

[Patricia]

What a beautiful compliment thank you for reading and reviewing:)!

[Horizons]

Very heartfelt write. Imagery`s well depicted in words written with your insights.

[Patricia]

Thank you for your kind words!

[Horizons]

Welcome! The title of the write`s all what catches all the attention of reader`s mind... to your page. I think, you`re a story-teller... are you? (if may I ask)

[Patricia]

Sure. But I don't really know if I am. Your are the reader I let you decide haha. What makes you think that I might be? (it's kind of interesting)

[Horizons]

I`m sure, you know how to get inside my heart. You fascinating. Well, yeah, i`m a reader so, yes, I may say, you are great, and of course, if it`s not too forward to say, you are a "beautiful" story-teller as well. I even find it in your words.. through an every drop of ink you left in contextual feelings written by your own writhing heart. Liked the way you let your heart go saved in words.. Well, quick honestly, it`s kinda hard doing capturing true feelings, voices and echoes of heart in words that you so smoothly do. Sounds interesting! However, Your poetry belongs to 'stories' either which creates suspense as well as an interest.. to consume your all deep signs inside the heart with a great cup of coffee... through the reflection of words. And, I think, it`s enough to say that you are beautiful. Even your beauty belongs to "Literature" itself. So, yeah, that`s all what made me even "believe "that you not "might" b... but you foresure ..."are".... already a fascinated story-teller.
I`d be looking forward to reading your work and, of course, having some words with ya!

[Patricia]

I think thats the most amazing thing anybody has ever written to me! Thank you so much this is such a huge complimen to me, wow. It makes me so happy when other people can ejoy my art and being a story-teller isn't acually that erroneous because I do tell a lot if people I trust and like ask the right questions. Writing is the only way for me to let things go and to get over things I cannot tell or express in any conversations and If I can touch anybody with this it is the greatest thing ever ( besides being classified as literature)! Also it is so interesting to experience myself through others eyes. It kind of helps me to get to know myself and learn to love myself, especially when I get to hear this!

[Clayre]

This is beautiful and so heartfelt. I absolutely loved it. Great job!

[Patricia]

Thank you for reading and your wonderful comment:)!

[Angad Waraich]

That is brilliant writing, i like how you weaved emotions into your words. Good job.

Thank you for sharing.
Angad

[Patricia]

Thank you for your lovely comment and for your reading!

[Angad Waraich]

You're most welcome ma'am. Keep writing. :)