The Faker

I can see who you are - don't try to hide.

Eclipsed and in the darkness -

Did you intend for all this?

Why apply mammoth effort

To find comfort in the night?

 

Unnatural jigsaw piece

Cloaked in chameleon's skin -

Slithering, vicious lizard.

Then the rain begins to fall...

 

Manipulated wet clay

Rapidly erodes in the rain.

Puddles reveal reflection

Of actual human form.

 

These words, painful to your ears,

Ringing with hypocrisy.

We all hide under thick sheets,

Not to be shunned to the night.

Reviews

[David Broderick]

Brilliant, your best so far if I do say so myself.
Your use of eclipse and mammoth in the first stanza conjures images of cave men - of the start of 2001: space odyssey. The second stanza makes you think of mutants, of Dr.Connors, and then the last line brings back the image of cave men again for me. The imagery is wonderful. You also feel a real hatred to the person being described, because of your intense description, especially in the third stanza.
A very enjoyable read. I've really learned from reading you poems that I should focus less on the rhyming and a lot more on what I want people to see when they read my work - so, thanks, I guess.
Keep up the good imagery!

[Emily Elizabeth]

I agree with David- this somehow reminded me of 2001. This poem seemed to represent time, in a strange way.
This is a fantastic, deep piece full of ambiguousness and yet strange alluring power over the reader. It's so mysterious and yet poignant and powerful. You write with such grace and such meaning. I loved the last stanza:

'These words, painful to your ears,
Ringing with hypocrisy.
We all hide under thick sheets,
Not to be shunned to the night.'

It speaks out to you as a person. 'We all hide under thick sheets, not to be shunned into the night' is such brilliant line! Thank you for sharing this fantastic write!