hurt mind

The coldest people are some of the happiest people
Words are cheap silence is powerful
Never underestimate thinking mind as
Is one of the deadliest weapon you can come across
Tears are fake but eyes tell the truth
Don't hurt a silent mind as you don't plan your murder out loud
Love and hate two strongest words that lay on your tongue
Don't disvalue their worth
use them wisely as they can turn against you
The most valuable treasure lay deep within dirt
When you see hurt and destroyed eyes
Those eyes understand the true meaning of life
Don't mistake real eyes with glass eyes

Reviews

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Great job,Patti. Your them and tone are very interesting, and I believe that you should not under estimate other people. Great job

[Lee]

I deeply enjoyed this. There's a somewhat omniscient tone throughout which really made these words feel like you were purposefully peeling back some covering, so to allow people to see the truth of (and be wary of) quiet individuals. Really, it's almost like you were listing rules for extroverts. Because society, if you think about it, isn't really made to positively respond to those that naturally are introspective and quiet. Society favors extroverts (look at school systems for ex). But by favoring one, we tend to discount the other, making them pay for simply being who they are. Which can be detrimental (for our extroverted friends, as you've made clear).

[James William Dyer]

Again, I love the sincerity of your words. But nothing is ever black and white. The coldest people are that way for complex reasons, and it is plumbing those depths, as hard as that may be, and trying to understand why the cold person does the things they do, it is those understandings that intrigues people. Words, too, are not cheap, they are the most powerful thing in the human arsenal. With one word, you can cut a person down, make them cry, make them lay in bed for weeks wanting to kill themselves. With two minutes of talking, you can take the most depressed person and give them confidence and hope. You can move armies, have mountains demolished, send men to split atoms and decimate millions, you can convince an entire country to burn millions of Jews, you can convince people that health care is a basic human right. I love the strength of your emotions, but I personally would like to see what you are saying....."when you see hurt and destroyed eyes"....maybe instead something like, "when you see the bright blue iris, now fractured splinters of ice, the lashes wet from a heart that thaws through hurt, ruined eyes".....it gives a visual component to the agony here. I liked the poem very much and hope to read more from you.

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a pondering intriguing write, enjoyed

[junaid altaf]

this is as if a river of experience and wisdom collected word by word and then composed and it stands right there!
brilliant!

[patti]

thank you, all great writing comes from experience.

[junaid altaf]

so true

[Coyote Poetry]

"Words are cheap silence is powerful "
I enjoyed this poem. Logical thoughts in the poem. Never underestimate another person. Better to have friends then floe. A strong ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[patti]

that is just the poem is about you should never judge something if you dont know true value of it.. thanks

[Nick.B]

True words...love the last line, great write

[patti]

thanks means a lot

[sithlordjp]

"Don't mistake real eyes with glass eyes" That last line perfectly does it for me, it is such a nice sum-up of everything that came before it, smart writing. Well done!

[patti]

thank you :)

[lee von cleef]

who sent you my way? give them a big hug this is great.

[patti]

I accidently came across your profile... thanks :)

[lee von cleef]

Some would say there are no accidents.

[patti]

only reasons behind every actions

[lee von cleef]

reasons , actions, math, science, conscious , subconscious, then God.Just fun to see where my thoughts land.

[patti]

i like the fact you put god till last, i may argue if god shud be on the list.

[lee von cleef]

A lot has happened to me, as i see it unexplainable things, unforgivable things,So I feel god is a big shoulder I can ask for mercy ,A umbrella to shade me, someone to forgive me for my un-compassionant thoughts, I try to live a truthful positive life but fight a cynical dark comedy that often sweeps me up. Ya Smile....

[KurKota]

Very interesting perspective. The last line is classic, very accurate. Very good job !

[patti]

thank you for taking time to read this