A Place to Rest Your Flaws

this is a song I wrote fairly recently

I've seen the world in so many lights

where dreams are dull and laughs are blind

and so I stay awake to find

 

a shade that has yet to desribe a day

where priests and addicts are the same

I wish my lips could cry a prayer

 

oh god, please bless me with a colored heart

a mouth that's brave and a tongue that's smart

with these I can move forward

 

here there are no shackles, there're no tears

just inconsistencies and fears

but I'll hold them close and keep them near

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

hm... so i'm thinking that i'm going to really like your work.

first of all, you have a way with titles. titles mean a lot to me; a shoddy title can completely turn me off from a piece. i find it hard to pick a piece to read of yours, since almost all the titles lure me in :)

"and so I stay awake to find


a shade that has yet to describe a day"

describe is typo-ed- i didn't realize that until i pasted the line onto here, so i didn't mean to correct that haha - but loved these lines and the way they went together.

hugs

[Scarlet Opal]

A cry for something... to color and revive your soul, that is the message I recieved.

I was listening to a particular song while I read your words. I could say that the euphorium of the music helped me concentrate and ultimately understand the emotions behind your poem but truly, it is the opposite. When I read, imagined, and felt the picture you were painting, I swear I could see the wondrous colors of the music penetrate my musical mind, and I saw God.

Which is funny considering that the song is called, "Losing My Religion."

Lol, but really, I think this is my most favorite poem yet. It's enrapturing but as you wonder, an overwhelming emptiness is left inside, and then you're filled with a subtle yet agonizing longing to connect with something more than your existance. It makes me want to weep.

[Destiny]

I like your writing style. I also like the imagery in this piece. My favorite lines are,

"and so I stay awake to find

a shade that has yet to desribe a day

where priests and addicts are the same"

Thank you for writing this.
♥Destiny♥