Wild Wax

Wild Wax

A Poem by pastelroses
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This poem is about wanting someone you can't have.

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His warm words melt her heart like wild wax wickedly walking

down a corrosive candle, brutality burning her porcelain skin.

His terrifying touch sends shivers down her spine as his

luscious lips linger lightly across her crimson cheeks.

Her body becomes silently still as her brittle bones become

fiercely frozen from his treacherous, trembling touch.

The vicious voices running rapidly though her head

suddenly stop as his electrifying eyes

gaze into her searing, scarred, shaken soul.

His luscious lips linger on her pink, pastel pout

which silently squeezes her hammering heart.

Suddenly stopping the ravishing red river

from flowing through her broken body.

He tightly touches her swollen, breasts.

as he wildly whispers in her ear,

making sure no one can hear

that he wickedly wishes she was his.

A tragic tear fiercely falls down her face

as the trembling truth breaks through the barrier in her brain.

Realizing that he will never be hers,

because his charismatic charm has already carefully captured

another wicked, wonderful woman.

And she already belongs to a magnificent man.

But she knows she will never forget

the tremendous taste of his lips on her searing skin

and how his warm words melted her heart like wild wax

 

© 2015 pastelroses


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This is a very nice piece of concrete poetry. I like the form, which I have little patience to create. Even more, I like the alliteration used throughout the poem that seems to make the end words pop, like champagne bubles in my head. There is so much going on that it takes a few reads to take it all in. The theme is very relatable from this end. Charismatic men can be toxic to the heart. The wax builds good imagery for many things, the melting of desire, tears, and the elusiveness of the feelings. This is a well constructed poem, and I hope to read more of your work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


A tragic truth captured by a wonderfully penned verse. I love your discription of wild wax. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


pastelroses

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the review. It is much appreciated. Thank you for taking the time to read my work.
I like what you done with this piece, doubling up letters, corrosive candle, luscious lips, fiercely frozen. it works well (now I'm doing it) Simply superb (stop it) Wonderful words (ah, I'm infected) :)
Great write, I really enjoyed this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


pastelroses

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the review. I am glad my writing style worked with this piece. Thank you for r.. read more
alifeacoustic

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome.

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Added on October 19, 2015
Last Updated on October 19, 2015
Tags: love, heartbreak, sadness, desire, longing


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