Beautiful Island

Beautiful Island

A Poem by pasch
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A poem about my adopted home

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Turquoise sea

Sun drenched beach

Towering Troodos

Snow capped heights

Mimosa scent on moonlight nights

 

Copper soil

Luscious growth

Groves of olives

Fecund vines

Glasses filled with rich red wines

 

Ancient isle

Often taken

Foreign footprints

Grecian still

Demonstration of greater will

 

Beautiful Island

Home of heart

Warm of welcome

Forever be

Set within its turquoise sea

© 2012 pasch


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This is beautiful. It has tons of great imagery and it seems as each sentence is placed very specifically. My favorite line was "Mimosa scent on moonlight nights." Ironically, that's the only line that I feel you may be able to improve if you'd like; you can change "moonLIGHT nights," to moonLIT nights. I feel like it would flow better this way.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

pasch

12 Years Ago

I think you're probably right about that line. Thank you for that - very helpful.



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όμορφο ποίημα!! I love your style that you apply to this poem. A very pretty ensemble of a most colorful palate you have chosen to use here and allow us to witness the construction of a poem that excites like that of a painting!! With the words "Grecian and turquoise" I am guessing this is Greece. Very nice...... Beautiful pasch. xoxo -Mark

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is beautiful and brings back memories of my brief visits to the area. I never set foot on Cyprus, but spent time in Athens and Corfu while a sailor in the US Navy. How wonderful I think it would be to see it all as you have seen it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


A very nice tribute and I very much like the rhymes to end each stanza. It's nicely descriptive and pulls you in. Have to agree, the last line first stanza is a corker :-) If I was to change anything, it'd be 'demonstration' - too many syllables for it to sit comfortably, I feel. Been to Kos, but that's it; shame!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is beautiful. It has tons of great imagery and it seems as each sentence is placed very specifically. My favorite line was "Mimosa scent on moonlight nights." Ironically, that's the only line that I feel you may be able to improve if you'd like; you can change "moonLIGHT nights," to moonLIT nights. I feel like it would flow better this way.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

pasch

12 Years Ago

I think you're probably right about that line. Thank you for that - very helpful.
Lovely inmage of this island...colours and scents and sights...

Posted 12 Years Ago



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pasch
pasch

paphos, paphos, Cyprus



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I read all sorts, write all sorts - live in Paphos Cyprus with a husband and three cats - been here since 2004 - I'm on Jottify, Twitter, Facebook yet I'm a bit of a technophobe. Originally from Scotl.. more..

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