i have seen you.............

I have seen you a million times 
And every time I see you 
I fall in love with you all over again 
My heart starts to race 
My frown turns into a smile 
And all my worries are now in my past 
When you smile at me my heart melts 
You give the sweetest hugs 
Every time you hug me 
Your smile is like a new day 
Your sense of humor is like no other 
The ability you have to make me smile 
Is all you need you love me 
Your laugh is so soft and sweet 
Just looking in your eyes 
Makes me melt inside 
Your lips look so soft 
Soft enough to kiss 
You, yourself relive me from all pain 
Your hands are as soft as a pillow 
The way you comfort me is amazing 
Every time we say good-bye 
I start to cry 
I say good-bye to you too many times 
I said good-bye to you a million times.

Reviews

[Ariana]

nice job

[tekphobik]

Alright, now, I'm going to disclaim this with saying mean things that aren't really directed completely at you but at this site as a whole.

It's not you, it's everyone.

That being said and out of the way...

Love? Seriously? I love you so much? Roses may be red, violets may be blue, but what the f**k people don't you know how to feel any deeper than that surface emotion you get in the presence of another you care about?

...

*blah blah rant rant blah rant blah*

My honest critique is that I'd like to see more depth. I don't want you to sound like a million other people. I don't want to see the same f*****g love poem a million times. I want you to care about someone so much that if you drove yourself deeper down beneath the surface you'd actually create a piece of poetry worth reading.

And blah blah, hate on me for not being sensitive or whatever.

F**k y'all if you don't see what I'm saying.