Destiny knot

never consider yourself to be alone:)

The time has been

 like its been forever

all the hope was

never say never

after all gone and 

you are left alone

you feel tight but u aren't right

maybe the GoDs want this to happen

but the one who wrote it all

already sent someone after me

someone before me

to look for me and not to leave

in the light its dark 

and seen

in the darkness it leaves 

and turns mean

But till this life of earth we got

it will never leave us

even if we abort

seems legit and a strange presence

its feel no touch 

but a mere essence

Its the shadow that 

never lies

black may appeal bad

but gives the highlight 

All through the circumstances 

my shadow was the one who taught

that we are caught up in a destiny knot

Author's Note

any advice and suggestions? i'd love to hear :)

Reviews

[Bri]

seems legit and a strange presence

its feel no touch

but a mere essence..

I love this. It's amazing. Only suggestion is that you use more commas to inflict pauses. Other than that, I absolutely love what you've written.

[paras]

thanks a lot :) i'll surely keep that in mind^^

[Coyote Poetry]

I seen bad and good days. I agree with the logic of the poem.
'Its the shadow that
never lies
black may appeal bad
but gives the highlight "
Sometime light can appear in the darkest of time. Destiny can change with one right or wrong turn. Always a pleasure to read your poetry.
Coyote

[paras]

thanks.!! that's exactly what i meant and am glad you like it :)

[prodicallife]

Dear Paras,

A very interesting write that is much attended by lots of confusions and a lot of maniac this definitely lures me to taste this very different flavor that you have kept with your thoughts.

Very good write.

Stay blessed
Prodical

[paras]

thank you
am glad you found it interesting :)

[prodicallife]

You are welcome :)

[Miles W.]

It seems to me like you are trying to portray the confusion that man might have on life, while also discussing how man tries to rise above the darkness, but not exactly succeeding. I personally don't believe in destiny as the media has played it out, but this poem is very interesting.

[paras]

yep exactly what i meant :) thanks am glad you liked it

[Radhika]

very thoughtful poem..i specially liked the lines :

"but the one who wrote it all
already sent someone after me
someone before me
to look for me and not to leave"

[paras]

thanks am glad you liked it :)