the you and me absurdity

I laughed and watched the world collapse,

Destroying all of worth

Then danced the form of time and space

My laugh became the earth.

I leapt along the path of past,

Shook reason by the hand,

Twisted the mighty mountain 'til

He told me why I am.

I drank the sea to quench this thirst,

Made turrets of the sky

Then turned the stars to stepping stones

We ran them you and I.

Reviews

[Ghostshell]

yes, awesome visuals and, of course, i love the rhythm.

[asdarkeyesclose]

Twisted the mighty mountain 'til
He told me why I am.

Some great images here- all slightly unexpected- the last stanza was my favourite. Beautifully written ;)

[K.C. Zbryk]

Very beautiful in its brevity. I like the picture that this poem paints, and the slight rhyme scheme makes this flow nicely. Extremely well written and i cant wait to read more.