The Shore

There was beauty in her turmoil

As she strolled along the sand

And shame and pride they followed,

Close behind her hand in hand.

 

And that silence that engulfed her,

It was strong enough to stand,

Through the ever-raging battle

Of the sea against the land.

 

Although the path her mind did walk

Was dark, she knew the way.

Many a time had it been walked,

Before that lonesome day.

 

And to that same familiar theme

Her thoughts began to stray,

Until that land of sea and sky,

Was many miles away.

 

Like a child with coloured bricks

She'd built it all to break

And now she walks forever on,

Destruction in her wake.

 

That little thing inside of her

That tests for testing's sake,

Knows with a grim but evil grin,

That ends are no mistake.

 

Strangers watch this pensive scene,

With smiles upon their face.

The girl walks on oblivious

To the beauty of this place.

Reviews

[Donald Meikle]

soft free oblivion chinkless armor weightless for the moment.
But what's life but moments?

[Ghostshell]

i. love. this.

it spoke to me. i could read it again and again.

[K.C. Zbryk]

This is an incredable write, and the flow is pristine. The story that you tell is inspiring, a little sad, but still moving. Too many people wander through this life oblivious to the beauty all around them. You have an amazing amount of talent.

[Dearantlers]

Whoa, that is beautiful! I could never ever write something this good! You are an amazing author.

[Terrance Brown]

I liked it too. There is a good flow to this poem. I like how the 'girl walks on oblivious', as I think we all must do in order to be true to our conception of beauty. And then there is the 'little thing inside of her that tests for testing's sake', how that resonates with me, and must do with everyone. You see it most in little children who push the boundaries set by their parents in a way that makes it seem like they are pushing just to see how far they can push. Very nice.

[asdarkeyesclose]

I loved this - my only suggestion would be 'Where shame and pride soon followed' in line 3 to write out 'did' which is a bit out dated. Liked the way you told the story and the smooth flow. :)