Black Was The Crow

Black Was The Crow

A Poem by L

We sat naked between us
Shredding silence
For our fingers were nervous enemies
And knew not where the time would go
Emptiness easier
We talked horizon's close
Dragging them eagerly
And ashamed

We shaped nothing, said nothing
And space was hard on words
We did not watch them stumble, trip
But turned our eyes to where we weren't

Our skin; so abandoned
Thus throbbed in our minds
There it touched and tumbled gently
Forcing unpermitted choked-back smiles

I wondered how your lips felt

Neither that night
Were braver than butterflies
And my face burned like the stars
As dark clothed us
And carried you off
Too soon 

© 2013 L


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tantalizing, the flickering shadows of repressed emotions, touching you so gently, as a velvet butterfly wing kissing soft lips.....
Aromatic in essence the pen drips of love in it's naked shades....if that makes any sense?

Posted 10 Years Ago


boundlessly sad, and acute, as is your want

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I found this quite interesting.
It's not an obvious kind of story: it's a poem in minor key, and that lends a rich layer which is not lost on this reader. It's a piece that permeates. Good poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


'Were braver than butterflies
And my face burned like the stars'

pretty. the way the words climb, unexpected and very moving. i loved the lightness of this and the way the emotions came across and the title was something great to go back to. you are amazing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love how this feels like a familiar dream, loved the lines best "
Our skin; so abandoned
Thus throbbed in our minds
There it touched and tumbled gently
Forcing unpermitted choked-back smiles

I wondered how your lips felt

Neither that night
Were braver than butterflies
And my face burned like the stars
As dark clothed us
And carried you off
Too soon "

That was just the best part of the poem for me, wonderful

Posted 11 Years Ago


Absolutely beautiful. The words flow like sweet syrup. I love the line, " For our fingers were like nervous enemies." Great write.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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