101

This is like a sequel to my poem "100 Days With You." So please read that first before reading this. Thank you. :)

101

 

A hundred and one days,

Finally, I’m out of your maze.

But as my grays looked up so high,

Glistening, a tear’s stuck on my eye.

 

For hundred days, you made me feel,

That you, my dream, can be so real.

Between us, hardly a word was spoken,

But your eyes defied everything, heart was awoken.

 

But with just a snap of the world’s finger,

Forbid my feelings for you to linger.

Yes, you had a change of heart,

Your world, sadly, I wasn’t a part.

 

Now I ask you, did you have fun?

Toying my heart like a child’s water gun.

If yes, then answer this one little thing,

Can you say that a bit of happiness I did bring?

 

Well, for you, maybe it wasn’t intentional,

To make me feel as if I was someone special.

Your hands veiled my already poor eyesight,

Because now I know I’ve never been Ms. Right.

 

For hundred days, it had only been her,

The one who made your everything blur.

Tell me, oh tell me, can you still be mine?

I know I’m no her, but lie to me that it’s fine.

 

A hundred and one has come and gone by.

If this the end of nonexistent you and I,

Then make it easy, make me hate you so,

Teach me, my love, the art of letting go.

Author's Note

It would have been so much better if you just said it straight...

The feel of this poem is totally different from the first one. So I'm sorry if you thought that this would have a happy feeling to it like that of "100 Days With You." Please do comment though. :)

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

Both this piece and the previous speak of life, love and the roller coaster that exists with our journey's dynamic existence on this Earth. I don't think you could have set up either one any better or any different, for they capture time, your emotions, joys and frustrations and allow them to run across the silver screen of our minds.
The only suggestion I could make would be about the second line in the last stanza of this piece... It thought it might sound a bit better as, "If this is the end..." IDK.. just my opinion.
Over all both of the pieces were well crafted and clearly carried your tale to your readers.

Really good life Ink!
Aaron

[JRB]

love, life and all in between, nice write ty,,,,,,

[Lily]

WOW this made me speechless!

[The Winter Grey]

Could there have been a more perfect sequel? This piece forgoes the humour and occasional glimpses of hope of the first and plunges the protagonist (and the reader) into a cold, harsh reality I think anyone whose ever been in love has experienced. Truth be told, I think this even better than "100 Days," while of course it would not be complete without it. All in all, this is great, and the two pieces together are genius.

[Nish...]

Sad ending, but it's perfect.

[CrushedPepperMinTCHrist..]

you did perfect

[ChaoticSoul]

1. I love the photo you have with this poem. 2. The poem itself wonderfully captures such a real and raw moment; "the art of letting go," I loved that. You have created some beautiful imagery here.

[Keeley]

This is really goood(: I absolutely love the feeling it leaves in my heart. Soo much mystery and just one poem. Love.

[BloodyMary]

Beautiful. I loved it and never got bored.

This poem is outstanding, and has a bite. I like the message in it, it's woven through all your lines.