The Way You Make Me Feel

Purely descriptive poem of how he makes me feel... I think. Haha.

The Way You Make Me Feel

 

Walking with my head held high,

Talking animatedly till I am bone dry.

But when I’m with you, I just try and try,

All that comes out - a frustrated, shy sigh.

 

Glares and stares, I can do them in a snap,

In my eyes, anyone feels like lost in a trap.

But when you look at me, it only takes a clap,

Averting my blue peepers under this white cap.

 

Jesting with me, I simply counterattacked,

Laughing so hard until my voice cracked.

But when it’s with you, I always get sidetracked

Cause you make it feel full - my urinary tract.

 

I used to hate the feeling of being in my school,

I just wished to sit whole day on my piano stool.

But when there were you, I banished this ground rule.

For all I want is to look at you and drool like a fool.

 

Before there were you, I retire early at night.

I didn’t have thoughts of turning feelings to a write.

But when you came along, everything just felt right,

Every piece of my mind, you haunt it like a mosquito bite.

 

Author's Note

Totally random. I just described how he makes me feel, but with rhymes! HAHA. Well okay, I don't drool. =)) Enjoy and tell me what you think about it.

Awarded 'Good Love Poem ♥' in the Love Poems Contest.

Reviews

[tk]

such a sweet, innocent feel in this piece! :)
very funny and it made me remember those high school days. i used to feel like this before.. haha!
"Cause you make it feel full - my urinary tract."
"For all I want is to look at you and drool like a fool."
totally hilarious. and the rhyming scheme is awesome.
such a noteworthy write by a notable writer. keep it up.
thanks for sharing!

[Yellow Butterfly]

I love it... this is so lovely and brings back fond memories of feelings of a first love encountered during Secondary school days.

A dreamy existance of love so true... I'm liking your work!

[Seanne Tholltree]

it's awesomely great

[Lily]

I love this!

[Dove]

First of all the title really caught my attention. Second the font is really nice for some reason it is really appealing to me and third, this is an amazing poem lol. Its a win for me because its wonderful and the flow was so smooth.

[SwagMaster]

So cute!!

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Aw...this is such a sweet, honest love poem. The font is a nice touch too. Excellent job with this piece! :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Yaayyy for love...feeling can't be beaten I would say...wonderful capture of thise tender moments...awesome awesome awesome !!!!

[Bridget Murphy]

Wow, you can write nothing but good poems!!!:)

[MetBySunlight]

Wow, I love this! Can relate to it a lot :P I love the poems that are the writer's emotions. You sometimes come across those who just write, and you can't really feel the emotion. I can feel the emotion in this poem (: I really like it, well done!

[Tai Ryens]

Nice job, I liked the use of words in the second and third stanza's, brilliant job there. Everyone feels like this when they're in love, so you're not alone, haha. I didn't quite get the last line of this whole poem, then again I might just not be thinking hard enough. Great job, keep it up!