You Can

This is a challenge. :))

You Can

 

It is evident that the world’s gone from bad to worse, but

You can turn it around like a knight on a beautiful black horse.

 

Depression, anger and fear have consumed the people’s hearts, but

You can be the sliver of hope that would slash these emotions apart.

 

Man has turned his back on his own brother, but

You can be the mutual friend who can reconnect them together.

 

Mother Earth’s been suffering from the greediness of man, but

You can take the first step into restoring everything under the sun.

 

They’ll say all of these will be in vain cause it’s just too late, but

You can turn a deaf ear and go changing fate.

 

You may try to run, act blind and simply throw this aside, but mind you,

You can never, ever hide.

Author's Note

*bites nails*
Yay to my first poem! Well, not counting the ones that i made as a requirement during my elementary years, because i can't remember them anymore. :)) As you can see, I'm really not good at playing with words (that's why I don't write poems, well, at least not until now). The poem's very straight forward. But I swear that I really, really tried my best (specially with the rhymes :">). =)) So, please comment (and be gentle! *bats eyelashes*).

P.S. I really hope this inspired you. I knooow, I'm too ambitious. HAHA.

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

Congrats on a very nicely made poem! :) It's got a good flow to it and walks us through sets of connections, all leading to the Earth and how if we don't alter our current course, we won't be able to hide from the effects of our misdeeds.

Thanks for sharing your creativity!
Wolfie

[Tai Ryens]

You're excellent at poem writing, but still, even given how wonderfully this was written, it could still be a tad bit better. The flow in this poem is excellent though, I loved it, and I loved the ending of this. It is true, you can run for awhile, but you could never hide, it would come back to haunt you later. The second stanza however stood out to me the most, it reminds me of myself. I'm probably the only one that can slice emotions and toss them away. Wonderful poem, it really makes me think.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Loving the flow of this poem and the way you express it simply amazes me. You're right. People have the power to change the course of what may happen and need to face it instead of hiding in the shadows watching what happens. A great poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. You open the door to many truths. We can change many things one person at a time. Kindness bring kindness. Love bring love. One person can create a wave of love and peace. Protecting nature and her resources is very important. We need Nature more then she needs us. Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[EylonBear]

This is a very good poem. Especially for your first one. They rhyme is good and it flows well. sometimes playing with words is not need and simplification is the best way. it is also very inspiring. I myself am in an Environmental Group at my college and the part about "restoring everything under the sun" was very close to home for me. good job Papara. Keep writing.

[SwagMaster]

Love it!

[MetBySunlight]

Wow, this is really good (: What you have put across, is actually quite true. I love it :P
WELL DONE! (:

[WritersSoul]

Aww thiss is a great poem :) i love the fact that you used alll the problems of today and used an array of solutions with great rhymes :)
Beth :3

[WildSoul]

so nicely written. I totally enjoyed reading this poem. Keep up the good work.

[Thea]

Truly neatly crafted poem...I like the concept and the some usage of words here...Wonderful work...Keep it up! :)))