Melancholy love

 

 

 

With the sun, rises a new hope each day

One word from her, is all I desire

Remembering all the places

Where we had once been

All the words, once whispered

Lost in her reverie, in her dreams

With the fading sun, lost is another day

Waiting in vain, nothing left to say

But faith never ceases, as time passes away

When my eyes shut, I see her

They open fruitlessly, only to miss her

Dreams become the new reality

Mind loses its normality

Is this how it was meant to be?

Not as we thought initially

In despair but the mind refuses to quit

The one that I called my life

Has she forsaken me?

It would remain unanswered for eternity

Being swallowed by the emptiness

inside Learnt to live, having lost it all

The new way of life, hollowed and alone...

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Dreams become the new reality

Mind loses its normality

Is this how it was meant to be?

Not as we thought initially

In despair but the mind refuses to quit

The one that I called my life

Has she forsaken me? "

Emotive , splendid...:)

[Pankaj Lohia]

thanks sami... thanks for the review and time to read this :) its an honour

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time...:)

[Roopal]

Emotional. Forces a person to go back in time. It has pain, desire, wait, hurt and a question. Everything that you want to have in a poem like this is there.

"With the fading sun, lost is another day"
I like the way you have said 'lost' and not past. It is like, the person's attempt to forget, to seek an answer is still unfruitful and he has lost yet another day in trying.

"Is this how it was meant to be?
Not as we thought initially"
We never realize that the plans we are making right now, will they ever come true. We think that everything is forever. We deny to accept the fact that dreams and plans perish.

"The new way of life, hollowed and alone"
I really like the fact that you have put in a lot of effort in each line. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing. Good Luck. :) :)

[Pankaj Lohia]

thanks roopal... thank you for the great review... yes, its true that I did take a while to write this poem.. and also that this poem is based on a true story :)

[Mary Christabel George]

This is really very painful write.
I appreciate the sadness & the genuine love for the lady portrayed here.
Lot of respect for this piece of writing & emotion.
Good luck for future endeavors.

[Pankaj Lohia]

thanks mary... :)

[Mary Christabel George]

You are welcome PL.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Well Done! Keep it up! Do u read mine 2 TIME and MANNER..if possible then gives ur review.. U can also add me on facebook

[Pankaj Lohia]

thanks lucky. Sure will go through your work :)

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Welcome

[Just Kim]

Very nicely said. sad really
But nicely expressed & written

[Pankaj Lohia]

thanks tabby... thank you for the review :)

[Dakshta]

Very nicely written..great job :)

[Pankaj Lohia]

thank you dakshta :)

[Dakshta]

welcome :)

[AVREEN]

You have very well expressed the pain in poetry

[Pankaj Lohia]

thanks avreen.. glad that a great poet like yourself likes my writing :)

[AVREEN]

You deserve the accolades.. Very well crafted

[Pankaj Lohia]

thank you avreen.

[Todd Mc' Callough]

beautifully tragic in it's own way. I really liked the lines about dreams;
Dreams become the new reality
Mind loses its normality
Is this how it was meant to be?
Very well written and easy to fall in love with.

[Pankaj Lohia]

Thanks for your valuable review George :) much appreciated from great poets like yourself. Thank you

[easybreezy]

So tragic, yet beautiful! This poem is very moving and is surely relatable to most readers.
Very well done!

[Pankaj Lohia]

thank you easybreezy... yea i bet it is relatable to a lot of people.. except the few lucky ones :)