I Am

I am the ghost that hides in your room.
I am the body boxed up in the tomb.

I am the secret that's hard to hold in.
I am the last little drops of your Gin.

I am the captain of the losing team.
I am that feeling that makes you scream.

I am the soul stealer, call me death.
I am the sensation of your last breath.

Reviews

[mariah]

i really like this, i didnt mind the repetitiveness, it works with a poem like this. great work, really i love this :)
-mariah

[Barbara Walker]

The "I am" gets a bit repetitious. Possible use I am... then all the rest of the sentences and maybe, "I am" with the last line. Good poem!

[Legion]

Pretty intense. I especially like the last stanza. I noticed in a few other pieces of yours (that I didn't leave a review) that you speak of a secret often. Interesting.

[quixotic_rose]

this gave me a very powerful sensation. Its almost like a nice suspense because you know like in the last stanza how they call you death, very powerful like giving death and introduction. very very awesome :)