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With no time to lose, Lucy packed and set off at midnight, with only a torch to lead the way, Rudy reluctantly trailing behind.

“Rudy, we must hurry. Who knows how much air is left in the...,” Lucy stopped in mid sentence and listened intently. “Do you think we’re being followed?”

Rudy whimpered in disbelief.


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The following day, a blizzard slowed them down. They sheltered inside a hollow tree.

“Oh Rudy, the torch went out. It’s so dark, I can’t see the back of my hands,“ said Lucy with trembling fingers. “Have some bread and butter. I’ll leave some on this boulder as well, so whoever is after us can eat it and not us.”

Rudy looked back at the trail, his ears alert.


8.
Lucy continued her journey south over the mountains with Rudy trailing behind. On the third day, they had to cross a frozen lake over which the sun would rise the next day.  She had almost reached her destination where her stone pendant could capture natural light and recharge itself.

“Come on, Rudy, the ice is quite thick. We can’t fall in,” Lucy encouraged, as she stepped onto the frozen lake.

A loud crack started from the shore where Lucy spotted a short stranger. The crack spread rapidly and reached Lucy feet.

“Rudy, help,” shrieked Lucy as her left leg plunged into the freezing water.

Her right leg slipped in shortly after. Lucy was soaked from chest down.

Reviews

[Horizon K.]

Oh no! Poor Lucy! This story is really intriguing and I can't wait to see the illustrations you create for it. As far as targeting the younger kids, well I'm still not sure. I picked up an old version of Hansel & Gretel recently and boy is that a dark story! I would just love to see where you go with this the way it is.

[Shan]

You are right, I'm struggling with the illustration for a few days already. It's a tough one considering all these happening in pitch dark. I'll just leave the pages black then.

It's hard to be believe, but yes a lot of children's stories are very very dark and scary. Is that what kids like? Even Harry Potter surprised me in the first book when it talked about killing and death.

Nobody's going to die in this story.

[Shan]

Is this story scary so far though?

[Horizon K.]

I'm not sure how scary... I guess it depends on if a child knows the actual dangers of being trapped in a mine or falling into a frozen lake.