Breath

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i'm swimming in the ocean. it is peaceful like a good dream. A huge wave is aproaching. Should i move or will it go away? i start slowly swimming. Then I start swimming frantically. Its getting faster and bigger. Behind it is set of larger waves. I told my self swim faster but it seemed like I was barely moving. the wave is almost to me. CRASH!!! It hits my face like a thousand knives, there's salt buiding on my teeth, Suddenly I can't breath. The surface of the water is slowly fading away as I sink deeper into the ocean. I kick as hard as I can trying to reach the top but still cant reach. I cant hold my breath any longer. the power of the waves keep pushing me all over in the water. I cant breath. i have to take a breath. I open my mouth... Then i woke up gasping for air. All the sudden i am in my bed its morning the birds are singing a sweet song out side, i smell the air... Pancakes are filing the air with their sweet buttery smell. My breathing has gone down everything is relaxed.

 

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Reviews

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Yes, that person can only try to give you his/her hand, but if you don't reach for it...but those kind of persons who would endure the waves along with you are hard to find in this world. And if you manage to do so, those waves just might seem smaller...

[Shy Girl]

My goodness. What a vivid story you created here and it's a dream. We either drown or rise above the tide. Very relatable piece you wrote for us to be enchanted with here. Thank you for sharing :)

[Simmirose]

nice job marg!

[xSamilynnx]

very good meg xD nicee!!!!

[Meagan]

me too...lol

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I'm glad we agree! :D

[Meagan]

I couldnt word it better:)

[Meagan]

Or the right person comes along and stands next to you. but doesnt help you get up. because thats for you to decide if you have the will and strength to press on. But when that person is with you more waves will come to test you but if the love is true you will both press on together.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

You get up and gather your courage to press on. You learn from your failure, so less and less waves will knock you down in the future.

[Meagan]

yes But what if that wave is dangerous and even when you prepare for it it knocks you down. so what do you do then... Get up or run?