The Gun

I need you now, can you sneek out? What? Its midnight, are you ok?

i will be later but i want you here when i do.

 

I snuck out the window that night and met her at the rail road tracks. I asked her what was wrong but all she did was laugh. I'm sick of trying, I'm sick of fighting, I'm sick of all this god damn lieing! The tears in her eyes told me what would happen next. You know I love you thats why I want you here. My heart was filled fear. I love you 2 but what are you going to do? She took that 9 out of her left pocket. It was already loaded so I didnt have time to stop her. she put it to her head and pulled. I cried out in the darkness as she fell to the floor and a dark puddle formed around her body. I collapsed at her side, layed there and cried. 

 

Reviews

[Mr. Lopez]

Your writting was dark and powerful with little time to really take notice of the plot until it unfolds before your eyes. It's exciting to be able to write the plots of stories that are played inside of our heads. As writers we tend to evnvision these "movies" and write the script in the form of poetry. You do this very well with great imagery.

[Wolfwind Words]

This was a powerful image you present here. It's one that would be a nightmare of an ordeal to actually have to endure. You writing about it though helps to see that Suicide is never the right way out. Leaving behind those that love and care.

Great little story! Keep up the good work!
Infinity's Shadow

[ac31595]

OMG that was AWSOME i think that was cool!

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

Alyssa you are the coolest and one of the most important person to me......i just want to say that i love the story and i am crying as i speak! you are the most passionate and loving person in the world!!
i love you and yur writings!!!

brava!
brava!

[That Weirdo You Just Mi..]

Oh My God!!That is like the saddest most depressing thing. But it is also a really good story!! I must give you your props! I just finished the A Walk To Remember BOOK and now I read this and am crying in my bed wishing i was talking to will. thanks so much! lol. jk jk jk jk jk