Color of Life

A poem about the color of life.

 

Lustrous lights shine

Glistening on fallen rain

Flowers burst vibrant red

 

Summer’s eve approaches near

Life has bloomed to maximum

 

Trees erupt bountiful

Supplies of crimson apples

Tantalizing treat

 

Nothing good can stay forever

A Thunderous storm rolls in

 

In a FLASH and BOOM

The super cell rampages on

All is set ablaze

 

Once the battle is over

Fruit and life are left charcoaled

Reviews

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what a scroll i made to read the second line after 'Lustrous lights shine'!!!!

well, i must say, it is a very beautiful piece of writing

you have shown the transition of the colorful world and the darkness so clearly

the first part is so colorful:

Trees erupt bountiful
Supplies of crimson apples
Tantalizing treat

Then the change, the transition , which may be referred to as 'Light & Dark" or even "Life and Death"

and you are right .. all good things definitely come to an end one day

and you've beautifully shown this by saying 'Fruit and life are left charcoaled'

meaning the shattered bliss from the colorful world

I liked it ...

i will read more of your works

:)

[La Belle Dame Sans Merc..]

First of all, I must say that it is a very bold move to ignore all punctuational conventions and unless there is an indisputable necessity it is like a child who refuses to color within the lines in order to seem "unconventional." I say all this in objective criticism. The only think harmonious about this piece was the color scheme of red and even that, I found meager.

[Ayun]

Sorry about the big space.