Words

relationship

 

I waited for the lifted moods

The crushing falls

The dull moments

Of empty thoughts

That for some reason

You found most important

And I found most impotent

 

Perhaps that was your

In to get out of

Whatever it was

That came before it

They were just words

 

Words, that in the end,

You threw around

Like dishes and bric-a-brac

Contemptuous pottery

And expletive stone wear

 

Words, jagged shrapnel

Of syllables and letters

That I merely swept up

And threw out in the trash

 

Words, that became

A broken language that

I understood all too well

But you never understood mine

Author's Note

writing is still such an effort for me, so sorry I have been gone for so long. I haven't been really reading any poetry either unless it is directly sent to me, it confuses me as I work through this block. Others find inspiration through other's words but it just confuses me with the style and content and I didn't want to accidentally plagiarize... So, this is all I have for right now.

Reviews

[Katrina Mckeown]

It’s difficult when the listener doesn’t really listen to what is actually being said and hears a completely different conversation.. the way they want to perceive it perhaps’ “the words that became a broken language that I understood so well, but you never understood mine .. a frustrating situation to be in indeed.
Well penned
Katrina

[Patricia]

Thank you Katrina for reading and commenting and nice to meet you. :)

[Katrina Mckeown]

Thank you… nice to meet you too Patricia 🙂

[Fabian G. Franklin]

So sad when the communication as well as the listening and understanding are one-sided. I enjoyed this write. You have such a wonderful voice that's much too inspiring to be drowned out by the crowd. Great write.

[Patricia]

Thank you Fabian for your very kind words. :)

[Fabian G. Franklin]

My pleasure.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is sad dear Patricia, how we become colder and we don't listen no-more.
"Words, jagged shrapnel
Of syllables and letters
That I merely swept up
And threw out in the trash"
I understand the above lines. Most of us don't appreciate what we had till it is gone. Thank you for sharing the worthwhile and powerful poetry.
Coyote

[Patricia]

Thank you so much Coyote, I think some people are just too damaged to communicate. I can't fix that, I can only fix me. HUGS my dear friend. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear friend and you are welcome.

[Robert Haigh]

Language is a wonderful thing, but words can indeed become "jagged shrapnel" if we don't like what the other person is saying. An inventive and well worked poem!

[Patricia]

Thank you Robert for your kind words. :)

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Wow, I can’t believe you wrote this during a writer’s block. The words and lines are all so gripping. It’s so neatly written and pulled together so nicely. The way it flows is perfect. The slow heartbreak is palpable and so strong. The last stanza is my favorite. Truly beautiful and relatable. Thank you for sharing!

[Patricia]

thank you Vertigo! Yes a writers block indeed and I am still blocked. So glad you like this one and I am very appreciative of your review. I will of course return the favor! Hugs! :)

[Einstein Noodle]

wow again ..you have captured tragedy in a bucket young lady! ... i hope you will continue to share your poetry .. and perhaps expand and read a bit .. there is a lot to offer ... right here at the Cafe' ... peace and joy Patricia!
E.

[Patricia]

Thank you Einstein and I go to the eye doctor today so hopefully a new pair of glasses will help me to see the screen better so I can spend more time here. Have a beautiful day and thanks for reading all my current writes and commenting! Hugs!

[Einstein Noodle]

hope that went well for you ...i have to make an appt. soon with my eye lady :)

[Patricia]

thank you and it went as expected no real big changes just a couple changes and a new pair of glasses

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ....................

[CD Campbell]

I find it amazing how simple communication between two people can flow so easily at one point, but later when you get to know them better, it seems to either fall on deaf ears, get misinterpreted, or the lack of will to understand falls by the way side. BTW, what you have is really good. I like this one alot. CD

[Patricia]

Thank you CD for reading and commenting as for your thoughts… it helps that the other is sane :)

[JE Falcon]

Ah, the mix and match do not always stay in the range of the matching. And our fleeting hopes for a blending over time often fail. --- Well done, the visuals were right and varied, and they touched some of my own.

[Patricia]

Thank you kindly JE...when a poem I write is relatable I consider it a great success. HUGS!

[Gee]

When these words written because of a failed relationship the pen must doubt whether trust can ever be given again, on the plus side when a decent partner found how much sweeter and cherished they will be.
Hi Patricia, hope you are keeping well, hugs from rainy Milton Keynes :)))

[Patricia]

You are so right Gee! Thank you for reading and commenting and I am doing very well and I hope you are as well. :) HUGS!

[Ranger Kessel]

Its a good read .understanding and understanding are too separate things. Thanks for posting. Best wishes

[Patricia]

Thank you Ranger and nice to meet you. I am glad you liked it. I will return the favor soon, I got errands right now but will return later. Have a beautiful day.

[Ranger Kessel]

Its a pleasure