My Sweet Star

Not even the unquestionable beauty of a stary, moonlit night can compare to the beauty of the love we share. It is only but our setting.

The sun scurries from the moon

As it rises from its rest,

And we plunge our lips together

Just pleading the moment

To last forever

FOREVER

 

And as the moon settles,

Nested just above our kiss,

We let its beauty swallow

Every scolding fist,

And melt in eachother's arms.

JUST MELT

 

Englfed in utter ecstasy,

We swim through eachother's veins,

As we let the gleaming show above

Demolish all our aches and pains,

And drench our broken hearts in love,

PURE LOVE

 

Pure love,

Is what I feel for you,

And no full moon night can compare

With what I know is true,

 

I'M SO IN LOVE WITH YOU

Reviews

[Stephanie W.]

this is beautiful

[soulsearching]

beautiful

thanks for sharing

[Forest Green]

Nice witness to love...

Sweet work.

[Clockwork]

The formation of your piece is very nice. There is a deep well of emotion beneath your words, one that seems to draw the reader in. You have ability and power. Don't let anyone discourage you from writing; you have a great deal of talent

[Jorge Ramos]

ugh! my comp froze! i wrote u like a whole book in review form! but it all erased!!!!

darn.

oh well, basicly all i said is that this is realy realy realy realy realy great work! i love the visual efects u added.

[Orlando Murcia]

This is almost like a song
It is really a great piece
I love your form and everything
about this piece

Great job

Orlando M

[Kitty Forzaken]

wow. This is amazing. I read your profile also and I feel like I can relate to you on such a deep level.