Love Can Fill Any Distance

 

Alone in her home with a knot is all ready,

And the stool right below is solid and steady,

With a sorrow so deep she tied that rope tight,

And hung it from the ceiling, creating this sight,

 

With a blank stare she examines the scene,

Bouquets from the funeral sit with beauty unseen,

And the noose and his picture clash enough so,

Her eyes burn with tears and her guilt starts to grow,

 

But she can’t turn back; she can’t live without him,

For what was once a bright light has faded so dim,

Life without him is nothing; it is no life at all,

So she slips her neck through the loop, ready to fall,

 

She looks down to her feet upon the wooden stool,

As she prepares to step off with a breath deep and cool,

She notices the her locket hanging below the death rope,

She takes it in her hand with a sting of hope,

 

She decides to read its inscription one last time,

So she eases it open to reveal his sweet rhyme,

Tears roll down her cheeks as she reads his loving words,

They’re like lyrics composed by the angels and sung by the birds,

 

“Though ninety-three million miles separate the moon and sun,

He can still illuminate the moon when the day is done,

Even when she can not feel his heat he is there,

And when I’m nowhere to be seen remember I am everywhere.”

 

With her face all but dry and her hands quickly shaking,

She slips out of the noose and into a new perception she’s taking,

With disgust for that rope she tears it down from the ceiling,

And she shines as her beautiful sun basks her in healing.

Reviews

[postscriptheart]

woah.....I really enjoyed this luv.....he really was there for her............thank you for sharing this little gem.

[Celtic Cat]

I love this. What a lovely enscripture on the necklace. It did go a little choppy there, and though I don't usually comment on rhythm breaks, this piece is too good to leave loose. I would suggest chopping "they're" and the "the"s off of the lyric line, maybe to help ease the flow.

It's amazing how many couples tend to follow each other out....if I read that right, he is dead, assuming those were his funeral flowers. I'm glad she didn't commit the act in the end, it was an unexpected happy ending which made it all the more powerful. I was convinced from the start she was going all the way. Excellent job on this piece, exquisite rhymes and lines within. Great writing!!!! Also a very nice touch that it was his words that convinced her to stay. Perfect.

[NCPanthersgurl]

I like this, it's very emotional without the dramatic suicidal endings that, as was previously reviewed, are common to poetry these days. It flows well, and I definitely liked the aspect that his words are what saved her; I suppose I'm a bit of a romantic at heart, haha.

[Jorge Ramos]

awsum job!!!!!!!
ur like one of the best ever!
lol
its realy good and i realy pictured everything about the girl who left.............................................
deeeeeeeeeeeeep

:D
999 outa 10!

[Sarah]

I really liked this, especially the idea that the girl decides to live at the end instead of killing herself (that's definitely original... it seems all people do is die & committ suicide in poetry these days xD) I liked the rhyme, you manage to make it sound so natural! Great job! ^____^