Clever Moments

Unrhymed French Quatern in rare 10 meter

Clever Moments

Clever moments, pretending wanting you,

never enters my mind; yet, it is real.

Memories sweetly keep it all alive …

feelings hidden within sighs' fervid breaths.

Wishing fate allows more peaceful daydreams,

clever moments, pretending wanting you,

flow through our lives beneath bright, starlit skies …

know ne'er again will two loving hearts meet.

Precious thoughts dancing like fireflies through life;

when soft fingertips once caressed blushed cheeks.

Clever moments, pretending wanting you,

      raindrops on petals stir lonely heartaches.

Passion holds us like air we do not see;

'cross time and back, lush lingering desires.

Yearning for simple yesterdays ~ so loved

… clever moments, pretending wanting you.

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Author's Note

If you happen to pass by and read my poem I would appreciate a review. If you have any suggestions please feel free to let me know.
Thank you for reading!!!
Lisa

Reviews

[Lorry]

I like that! Calling the memory of some thought clever moments!
We all have them, along with some really dumb ones too in my case, but memory erases the dumb folder in our minds far more frequently, which must explain why those clever moments remain so crystal in out minds.
I think mine are stored in a plastic wallet that may be red or pink in colour, which might explain all those rose tinted happy memories! 😃

[Lisasview]

Hi Lorry,
Delighted that you understood what I meant by Clever Moments...
Rose tinted happy memories are always the very best...
Lisa

[Lena Chere]

I like the repetition of the line, the varied emotions and images, and the way you have shaped the poem on the page.
Most of the poetry I've seen so far on Writer's Café is romantic. Your romantic poetry is deeply felt and has a musical tone.

[Lisasview]

Thank you for reading my poem...I appreciate your review....Musical note... hum...now that is interesting...Yes, I do write quite a bit about relationships... However, I do have a few that are not... For example Innocence which is in metaphors... You might like it for a change?
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear Lisa
An extraordinary write...One leaves me with questions about their relationship, almost like a tease....many doubts about desires and pretending to to desire....when in fact, the desire is real, not imagined....and keeping those memories alive as much as possible....you show us heartfelt feelings of love and loss....sad with a bit of hope...
Warmly, B

[Lisasview]

Love, love, love your kind review... You hit the nail with your comments and I am so appreciative.read moreLove, love, love your kind review... You hit the nail with your comments and I am so appreciative.
Hugs,
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome Lisa ; hope you are well😊
Warmly, B

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Lisa… Tempestuous power has it”s moments that we hope to experience.. orchestrated heavenly moments where Angels become earthbound. A pleasure to keep always. tenderly, Pat

[Lisasview]

You are always such a dear with your beautifully written reviews!!
Thank you so much,
Lisa

[John]

I like the way 'clever' is dropped into a poem about memory and desire. It's almost like a meta comment on the way the poem is enacting the whole process it is describing. Form is inextricably from content, as it is in the best of poems.

[Lisasview]

Wow, what an amazing review ending with "in the best of poem"
Thank you John for reading and reviewing.
If you are up to reading more I think you might enjoy Forevermore...about my own death or Innocence which is full of metaphors to contemplate... Both are down the list of poems I have posted.
Thank you again,
Lisa

[John]

You're very welcome

[emmajoygreen]

'Precious thoughts dancing like fireflies through life;
when soft fingertips once caressed blushed cheeks
Clever moments, pretending wanting you,
raindrops on petals stir lonely heartaches

Seems there's a serious journey here but, same time a near almost resignation that the sun won't be shining warm by the end of it. There are often signs, pauses, doubts along a route, warnings from nowhere, thoughts painful, itinerary too full one day, near empty the next. Love has either a peace and joy start to finish incomplete or a tempestuous passion that gradually loses power. Whichever appears to be drenched with hope yet.. doubtful; thoughtful but wondering if too many times of a moment.

A sad though finely laid poem, but - wondering if the start knew the ending in advance?

[Lisasview]

Always a joy to read your thoughts on my work...I never know the ending it just comes as I write... so nothing is ever planned.
Hugs,
Lisa

[emmajoygreen]

Am occasionally the same but your range, emotions and imagination far extend mine! Come to think of it, they are a literary triumvirate! (Wish I'd just put trio!)

[Lisasview]

Again, such nice things to say that inspire me to write more and more!

[emmajoygreen]

Hello, just been exploring a Canadian group that played in a local village in the Uk a month or so ago. Fine musicians, folk and varied. Is music that keeps me going day to day at present.. choose all sorts according to the mood and/or discomfort! :)

[tumi]

strong flow of word, in such a poignant poem
a splendid piece

[Lisasview]

Hi Tumi,
Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.. and saying that it is splendid...
Lisasview

[CRISHAM]

Woooow!!! This poem beautifully captures the bittersweet longing and heartache of unfulfilled love. The repetition of "clever moments, pretending wanting you" adds to the sense of yearning and the delicate balance between desire and restraint. The imagery of memories, fireflies, and raindrops evokes a quiet sadness, as if you are gently holding onto what once was. There’s a tender melancholy in the way passion and nostalgia weave through time, leaving the reader with a deep sense of wistfulness. It’s a touching reflection on love, loss, and the ache of what could have been.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. You really understood my feelings writing this...
Appreciate your review,
Lisasview