If you happen to pass by and read my poem I would appreciate a review. If you have any suggestions please feel free to let me know.
Thank you for reading!!!
Lisa
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I like that! Calling the memory of some thought clever moments!
We all have them, along with some really dumb ones too in my case, but memory erases the dumb folder in our minds far more frequently, which must explain why those clever moments remain so crystal in out minds.
I think mine are stored in a plastic wallet that may be red or pink in colour, which might explain all those rose tinted happy memories! 😃
Posted 3 Weeks Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
3 Weeks Ago
Hi Lorry,
Delighted that you understood what I meant by Clever Moments...
Rose tinted .. read moreHi Lorry,
Delighted that you understood what I meant by Clever Moments...
Rose tinted happy memories are always the very best...
Lisa
I like that! Calling the memory of some thought clever moments!
We all have them, along with some really dumb ones too in my case, but memory erases the dumb folder in our minds far more frequently, which must explain why those clever moments remain so crystal in out minds.
I think mine are stored in a plastic wallet that may be red or pink in colour, which might explain all those rose tinted happy memories! 😃
Posted 3 Weeks Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
3 Weeks Ago
Hi Lorry,
Delighted that you understood what I meant by Clever Moments...
Rose tinted .. read moreHi Lorry,
Delighted that you understood what I meant by Clever Moments...
Rose tinted happy memories are always the very best...
Lisa
I like the repetition of the line, the varied emotions and images, and the way you have shaped the poem on the page.
Most of the poetry I've seen so far on Writer's Café is romantic. Your romantic poetry is deeply felt and has a musical tone.
Posted 4 Weeks Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Weeks Ago
Thank you for reading my poem...I appreciate your review....Musical note... hum...now that is intere.. read moreThank you for reading my poem...I appreciate your review....Musical note... hum...now that is interesting...Yes, I do write quite a bit about relationships... However, I do have a few that are not... For example Innocence which is in metaphors... You might like it for a change?
Lisa
Dear Lisa
An extraordinary write...One leaves me with questions about their relationship, almost like a tease....many doubts about desires and pretending to to desire....when in fact, the desire is real, not imagined....and keeping those memories alive as much as possible....you show us heartfelt feelings of love and loss....sad with a bit of hope...
Warmly, B
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Weeks Ago
Love, love, love your kind review... You hit the nail with your comments and I am so appreciative.read moreLove, love, love your kind review... You hit the nail with your comments and I am so appreciative.
Hugs,
Lisa
4 Weeks Ago
You’re very welcome Lisa ; hope you are well😊
Warmly, B
dear Lisa… Tempestuous power has it”s moments that we hope to experience.. orchestrated heavenly moments where Angels become earthbound. A pleasure to keep always. tenderly, Pat
Posted 1 Month Ago
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4 Weeks Ago
You are always such a dear with your beautifully written reviews!!
Thank you so much,
.. read moreYou are always such a dear with your beautifully written reviews!!
Thank you so much,
Lisa
I like the way 'clever' is dropped into a poem about memory and desire. It's almost like a meta comment on the way the poem is enacting the whole process it is describing. Form is inextricably from content, as it is in the best of poems.
Posted 1 Month Ago
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1 Month Ago
Wow, what an amazing review ending with "in the best of poem"
Thank you John for reading and .. read moreWow, what an amazing review ending with "in the best of poem"
Thank you John for reading and reviewing.
If you are up to reading more I think you might enjoy Forevermore...about my own death or Innocence which is full of metaphors to contemplate... Both are down the list of poems I have posted.
Thank you again,
Lisa
'Precious thoughts dancing like fireflies through life;
when soft fingertips once caressed blushed cheeks
Clever moments, pretending wanting you,
raindrops on petals stir lonely heartaches
Seems there's a serious journey here but, same time a near almost resignation that the sun won't be shining warm by the end of it. There are often signs, pauses, doubts along a route, warnings from nowhere, thoughts painful, itinerary too full one day, near empty the next. Love has either a peace and joy start to finish incomplete or a tempestuous passion that gradually loses power. Whichever appears to be drenched with hope yet.. doubtful; thoughtful but wondering if too many times of a moment.
A sad though finely laid poem, but - wondering if the start knew the ending in advance?
Posted 1 Month Ago
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1 Month Ago
Always a joy to read your thoughts on my work...I never know the ending it just comes as I write... .. read moreAlways a joy to read your thoughts on my work...I never know the ending it just comes as I write... so nothing is ever planned.
Hugs,
Lisa
Am occasionally the same but your range, emotions and imagination far extend mine! Come to think of.. read moreAm occasionally the same but your range, emotions and imagination far extend mine! Come to think of it, they are a literary triumvirate! (Wish I'd just put trio!)
1 Month Ago
Again, such nice things to say that inspire me to write more and more!
1 Month Ago
Hello, just been exploring a Canadian group that played in a local village in the Uk a month or so a.. read moreHello, just been exploring a Canadian group that played in a local village in the Uk a month or so ago. Fine musicians, folk and varied. Is music that keeps me going day to day at present.. choose all sorts according to the mood and/or discomfort! :)
strong flow of word, in such a poignant poem
a splendid piece
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Month Ago
Hi Tumi,
Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.. and saying that it is splendid...<.. read moreHi Tumi,
Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.. and saying that it is splendid...
Lisasview
Woooow!!! This poem beautifully captures the bittersweet longing and heartache of unfulfilled love. The repetition of "clever moments, pretending wanting you" adds to the sense of yearning and the delicate balance between desire and restraint. The imagery of memories, fireflies, and raindrops evokes a quiet sadness, as if you are gently holding onto what once was. There’s a tender melancholy in the way passion and nostalgia weave through time, leaving the reader with a deep sense of wistfulness. It’s a touching reflection on love, loss, and the ache of what could have been.
Posted 1 Month Ago
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1 Month Ago
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. You really understood my feelings writing this... read moreThank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. You really understood my feelings writing this...
Appreciate your review,
Lisasview
I have been writing poetry and short stories since I was 10..so 64 years!
I have never connected with any groups but recently thought why not..
So here I ..looking at where this adventure leads me. more..