Beautiful artwork and wonderful dance of words dear Lisa.
“Too late,” I say, “hard vines conceal my want;
compelled, I’ve longed (at last) to start anew!”
Of you, I always dream; you always taunt,
aware that never your love will be true"
I adored the above lines. To be wrapped in love. A rare safe place. Thank you dear friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Posted 10 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Months Ago
Oh goodness another fabulous review ... Thank you... This is most definitely one of my most favourit.. read moreOh goodness another fabulous review ... Thank you... This is most definitely one of my most favourite poems.
I also like my poem Innocence which is full of Metaphors and since I wrote it awhile ack you may have already reviewed it...
Lisa
An elegant write Lisa and matches the picture so well. I can see the work involved to produce a lovely sonnet.
Posted 10 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Months Ago
Thank you Andrew,
I dod not write much last year dues to my falls
and then this year.... read moreThank you Andrew,
I dod not write much last year dues to my falls
and then this year... I recently got a new knee. So I do so appreciate that you went back and found a poem that you like and reviewed it.
This means a lot to me.
I plan on getting back to writing.. miss it...
Lisa
Beautiful artwork and wonderful dance of words dear Lisa.
“Too late,” I say, “hard vines conceal my want;
compelled, I’ve longed (at last) to start anew!”
Of you, I always dream; you always taunt,
aware that never your love will be true"
I adored the above lines. To be wrapped in love. A rare safe place. Thank you dear friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Posted 10 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Months Ago
Oh goodness another fabulous review ... Thank you... This is most definitely one of my most favourit.. read moreOh goodness another fabulous review ... Thank you... This is most definitely one of my most favourite poems.
I also like my poem Innocence which is full of Metaphors and since I wrote it awhile ack you may have already reviewed it...
Lisa
Ah, it's complex and beautifully written. It makes me think of Tennesee William's 'A Streetcar Named Desire,' Blanche DuBois says, "Death... the opposite is desire."
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Year Ago
Thank you so much Mike,
Yes, it is complex and took me awhile to write this Sonnet.
I .. read moreThank you so much Mike,
Yes, it is complex and took me awhile to write this Sonnet.
I so appreciate your review,
Lisa
I notice you have abandonded the strict iamb at all times thinking and now write a more natural sounding line. AL ways, of you I dream ~ AL ways, you taunt,
The use of a trochee, flipping the iamb backwards, works wonders in this line, but the line is still mostly iambic pentameter.
Winston
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 Year Ago
Just sent you a message… I beg to differ with you.
Is a Sonnet
My line is a true iam.. read moreJust sent you a message… I beg to differ with you.
Is a Sonnet
My line is a true iambic line al WAYS
Soft -hard
Not AL ways
Glad you liked my poem
Fine wines improve with age I'm told, and their value only increases. If they cannot see that, then perhaps its time to leave him marked down in the discount aisle and let someone with a more discerning pallate enjoy your bouquet.
Those vines only wither when not cared for you know!
Excellent write, as ever.
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 Year Ago
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my work.
I really appreciate it!
Lisa
dearest Lisa... aging can be like Wine... clinging to a Vine to be pleasured with sunshine and rain that nourishes and becomes an aphrodisiac of romantic delicate embraces. gently, Pat
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Year Ago
Again, a lovely review from you dearest Pat.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my.. read moreAgain, a lovely review from you dearest Pat.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my newest Sonnet.
Lisa
you have figured out that his passion is fading just like the vines are... and you are a bit lost; and it taunts you... so move on to someone who will give what you desire and deserve.... lovely write and rhyme Lisa...
Warmly, B
PS please review my poems, thank you
Posted 1 Year Ago
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1 Year Ago
Hi Betty, thank you for reading and reviewing my poem... I do appreciate it.
I am so far behi.. read moreHi Betty, thank you for reading and reviewing my poem... I do appreciate it.
I am so far behind in reviewing because I had two major fall and was unable to write for several months. So please forgive my tardiness... I promised to reviewing soon.
Lisa
1 Year Ago
You're very welcome Lisa, and no apologies needed....
Warmly, B
A beautiful poem set in a classical elegant style. So well metered and rhymed it carries me along as if it were a fragrent aroma drifting through the air guiding me to its source.
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Year Ago
Hi Soren, How nice to hear from you!
Thank you so your very wonderful review. Glad my poem d.. read moreHi Soren, How nice to hear from you!
Thank you so your very wonderful review. Glad my poem did what I hoped it would do ...
I am wondering if you read the one I wrote right before this one? Temptation?
I think you might enjoy it,
Lisa
I have been writing poetry and short stories since I was 10..so 64 years!
I have never connected with any groups but recently thought why not..
So here I ..looking at where this adventure leads me. more..