Temptation

Been away from reading, reviewing an writing ... Now I am back .. Missed you all. Freestyle poetry

Temptation

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Temptation urged me closer,

   his hips swaying smoothly

with each undulating beat.

Upon his lips my eyes fixated, 

like a string to a red balloon.

My body filled with heat;

I couldn't pull away.

He did not see me

through the screaming crowd.

Moving free ~

music loud

lost under his spell.

Sweat glistened over his body …

like dew drops shimmering

on soft, glimmering rose petals;

 I could smell sweetness.

Our eyes met ~ as tho’ we were one,

fell into a trance, yet;

  sultry rhythms took over … 

to his song, I began to dance along.

Without warning, the music stopped!

Off the stage my love leapt,

kissed me tenderly, as

"temptation" swept

us away....!

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Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would appreciate a review. I always review everything I read.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

You asked if I had read this poem and I hadn't! Had I done so, promise - would not have forgotten it very quickly. Firstly, the initial presentation - literally striking all the right introductions and made me smile - you canny creature, you! Moving on, adding that royally regal word, 'sweat'. Why does it suggest heat?. Anyone not knowing, ask Lisa. Moving even more - seems temptation didn't have to work very hard, did it!

Perhaps a book is on the go and you're considering twenty tones of bright red! Kudos, my friend.

[Lisasview]

Good morning dearest Emma,
I am dealing with jet lag so I am up 3:18am, and saw your wonderful review!! The words you use to describe my poem are perfect..Really happy to know you liked it. I have been away from writing for quite sometime. I really do want to get back to it. Seems my busy life just gets in the way..
Hope all is well with you,
Lisa

[emmajoygreen]

Almost good night here, but so pleased to 'see' you here! (02.27) Hope you can get over that jet lag soon, is horrible! Hope your absence was a holiday and memorable! If not, why not!

Life should never be so busy that you can't dream and imagine for just a teeny while - surely!? Hope it won't be long when you're juggling with a pile of reviews! Till then, my review was a thank you for taking me off and away from all those whatevers!
Smile - the world gently demands it.

[Lisasview]

Oh my travel was with Bib to see my daughter Heather in Texas. 12 days and the first time since we moved to Spain 4 years ago.
I am busy doing what I love… but I love way to many things.. ha ha
Writing takes a lot of time… and I need to be in the mood…
Came home to our veggie garden if chard and peas.. lovely dinner over rice.
Not sure if I told you or not but I got a new knee replaced in January and then 7 weeks ago caught a cold - flu and then bronchitis which was a challenge dealing with..
I also paint, make hand wired necklaces and practice piano… plus of course the gardens and cooking…and entertaining…so never a dull moment..❤️🥰

[emmajoygreen]

Er.. um.. tell me, when do you have time to breathe!
Busy you, but that's what life's about.. live it!

You must have had a wonderful time, visiting your daughter in that extraordinary state. Did you chat a little or more,.. please rate on a scale of
1: 1,000.000! Hope you're home with memories and photos galore! (will bore you what I try to do now and again, one day!)

[Marlon Ferguson]

Captures the wantoness of desire and the spontaneity of attraction admirably. I like the efficency and direction of lanquage as well.

[Lisasview]

Thank you Marlon for taking the time to read another poem of mine...quite different from the other one you read. I really did enjoy writing this...
Lisa

[Poetic Beauty]

This sounds like a thrilling experience. Those moments that heat us to the core totally unexpected.

I loved the use of the word temptation and heat. I picture a person at a concert dancing to the music, locking eyes with the lead singer and unexpectedly things happen.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem…I can tell you understood my thoughts behind my words…
Perhaps she already knew him??? Either way
Temptation took over.
Lisasview, now in Spain

[Poetic Beauty]

It doesn’t matter if she already knew him or if it was a chance encounter. Either way it is spell binding!!

[Lisasview]

Yes, that is what I was saying… either way they connected… thank you for saying spell binding!!

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome

[andrew mitchell]

A romantic gem which reminds me of those Hollywood movies boy meets girl or girl meets boy in the maddening crowd. Very nicely formatted.

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness a third review... Wow weeee..
I realised last year that I enjoyed writing sensuous
poetry as well as other styles.
So nice of you to use the kind word "Gem"
Probably the fact that I grew up In Hollywood, Ca... had a lot to do with the way I think...
Lisa

[Arundass TP]

Interesting line's. Loved it's emotions description. Good work 👍

[Lisasview]

Good morning Arundass,
Please forgive me or not responding sooner.
I had a couple of bad fans last year and could not use my right arm, etc. So I fell behind in writing, reading and reviewing.
I am back to it now as I am home recovering from a new knee.
Glad you enjoyed my poem... the fact that you find it interesting means a lot..
Lisa

[Arundass TP]

Thanks for writing. Praying for quicker recovery from accident. Expect for more creative writing of yours. Have a nice day

[Lisasview]

Oh I did not have an accident... just a new knee..
Thank you for your kind response.
Lisa

[Tate Morgan]

Oh the loves we have led. The concerts the music However rarely it does both. I had a friend the other day look into booking 6 tickets to Taylor Swift. $29,000 insane i pity the generation we leave behind Never to know what it was to be truly moved.

[Lisasview]

How nice to hear from you... When I first read your first line, I had to mull it over... I was thinking LOVES... but then I realised you meant LIVES...Yes, we are the lucky generation.
Gosh tickets for the Beatles at the Hollywood Bowl were probably $8.00... seemed like a lot to us then.... But goodness, $29,000 for Taylor Swift is ridiculous,,,
I so agree with your comments...
What did you mean by this sentence...The concerts the music However rarely it does both.
Lisa

[Tate Morgan]

That’s what happens when I speak to my phone and it copy my voice. It doesn’t get it right all the time I apologize.

[Lisasview]

No worries, just tried to make sense of it.
By the way did you see the Elton John movie on Net Flex? It was so good.
Lisa

[Tate Morgan]

I have not

[Lisasview]

On Netflix... well worth the watch... So enjoyable Tate.
Lisa

[Tate Morgan]

I’ll take a look

[Lisasview]

Yes, do...

[Ken e Bujold]

ah yes, tempted by the fruit of another. Man's blessing, if somewhat cursed by times, since we first took to wandering through Eden.

lovely poem Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hi there stranger, I say that because I have been away due to bone breaks for quite sometime!
Connection is what it is all about...right..
Lisasview

[Ken e Bujold]

bone breaks, sounds painful. hope all is well, or returning to well

[Lisasview]

Yes, clavicle first then a month later 3 ribs..Still trying to get my muscles back where they were..
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

Divinely sensual and so vivid , I love the red print, goes perfectly with poem… from beginning to end everything fits perfectly, and then a surprise ending which tops it off so well…loved every line Kisa and the rhyme as well…
Warmly, B
PS glad you’re all healed

[Lisasview]

Thank you Betty, still in physical therapy and there still is some pain... Hate not being 100% myself.
Glad you enjoyed my newest poem.
Hoping to write more.
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome Lisa!
PS I have a impingement in my shoulder so I empathize with you!

[Lorry]

Well I must say Lisa, I am shocked, appalled and not a little perplexed. I mean, when have you ever read anything where men treat woman like bits of meat..... Oh, wait a minute... We do, don't we? Me bad!
Anyway, as I was saying, another wonderful write and more power to your pen 😊

[Lisasview]

When I began to read your review my heart sank!! I was of course upset...
First, of all I completely disagree with your statement.
Obviously she knew this guy ~ her lover, and came in late to the club and went back with him to their home.
Anyway, then I read the rest of your review... saying wonderful write...so now I do feel better.
Lisa

[William Michael Reeves]

Your love was a star. He lept off the stage to body surf right into your life. This poem felt primal to me. I imagined all the bodies swaying in the ritual of rhythm. Uninhibited screaming and sweating ... and lusting. My oh my!!

[Lisasview]

Thank you Michael so much for reading and reviewing. Love your words... "body surf right into your life"
I need to find time to read more and write more.
Lisa