Interlude On Ice

Rhyming Cameo Style ...my own version.

INTERLUDE On ICE

Brazen, 

gliding on the edge.

Glassy ice calls her name again!

Moving now,

auburn hair floating in the air …

dancing on skates, like no one

is there.

Author's Note

If you read my Rhyming Cameo poem I would appreciate a review.
I always review whatever I read.
Hope you enjoy my first try at this form. 7 lines ... 2-5-8-3-8-7-2 syllables
Lisa

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

The feeling of skates cutting across ice, setting up speed, raising one leg, turning, turning then - swirling into the air is breath-taking! As is your poem. You have captured that feelings in seven lines, a fine visual and a remarkable genre!

How descriptive your words, how emotionally physical,

'auburn hair floating in the air …
dancing on skates, like no one
is there.'

Nobody but you could be there.. ever. It embraces time, yours.

[Lisasview]

Hello again,
Weird thing is that I just finished reading something you wrote and tried to leave a review but there was no place to post my comment…I will try again in my computer later… I am able to comment on this one.
I always love your revues Emma… thank you!
Lisa

[emmajoygreen]

Yet another oops.. The place must be tired after a busy weekend! I know you wanted to leave a rave review!!!! :) And (tut tut) thank you!

[William Michael Reeves]

Nice job referring to the phrase 'dance like no one is watching' without being obvious about it. Ice skaters do some scary things so brazen is for sure! Dangerous beautiful movement. And I just had a vision of her blades drawing her name in the ice. I judge this to be 9.9. I've never heard of the form, so I can't give you a 10. Cameo??? I'll check it out. Gold medal poetry Lisa ... still in Spain?

[Lisasview]

Hi William,
Yes, look up Cameo poetry. Such fun to write in this form... Not as easy as it looks...
This is not a true Cameo, as I put in Rhymes...my own version.
I wrote another true Cameo an will be posting it quite soon.
YES, I now live full time in Costa Blanca, Spain.
We do not plan on going back to the States.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much dear William,
I appreciate your support.
I realize that I accidentally typed 8 twice…
So it should read 2583872
So 7 lines
And. When I get home to my computer I am going to change floating … as I used it twice.
So strange that I did not catch that.🙁

[William Michael Reeves]

Your edits are great. I like the that triple rhyme at the end. Feels natural. This is like a snapshot of a bigger story and gives the reader enough to know the whole story. Good poem Lisa!

[Lisasview]

Thank you again for your thoughtful review Bill ...
You know that the triple rhyme was an accident... definetly natural...but not exactly what a Cameo is ... In a Cameo there are no rhymes. I wrote one correctly and plan to post it.
Lisa

[John the Baptist]

I wonder if this one describes an actual performance, or if the ice dancer is a metaphor for something else. She could represent the total immersion that is the mark of the true artist.

[Lisasview]

Well, yes, dear John... I love using metaphors and I feel you read my Rhyming Cameo correctly!
But then again whatever a reader choses to enjoy from any of my poems means a lot to me...
Thank you for reading and reviewing,
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hi John,
I made a couple of changes so if you have a moment you might like to read my poem again.
Lisa

[willweb]

A beautiful picture is painted with your words and you have used the form splendidly. I had not heard of this form before, I like it. I like how it looks like a small picture and the words create what we see.

[Lisasview]

I too had never heard of it.... but thought I would give it a try.
I really enjoyed writing it.
Thank you for your kind review.
Lisa

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa,

This is brevity at its finest ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your review!
Lisa, now in Spain