Interlude On Ice

Rhyming Cameo Style ...my own version.

INTERLUDE On ICE

Brazen, 

gliding on the edge.

Glassy ice calls her name again!

Moving now,

auburn hair floating in the air …

dancing on skates, like no one

is there.

Author's Note

If you read my Rhyming Cameo poem I would appreciate a review.
I always review whatever I read.
Hope you enjoy my first try at this form. 7 lines ... 2-5-8-3-8-7-2 syllables
Lisa

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

The feeling of skates cutting across ice, setting up speed, raising one leg, turning, turning then - swirling into the air is breath-taking! As is your poem. You have captured that feelings in seven lines, a fine visual and a remarkable genre!

How descriptive your words, how emotionally physical,

'auburn hair floating in the air …
dancing on skates, like no one
is there.'

Nobody but you could be there.. ever. It embraces time, yours.

[Lisasview]

Hello again,
Weird thing is that I just finished reading something you wrote and tried to leave a review but there was no place to post my comment…I will try again in my computer later… I am able to comment on this one.
I always love your revues Emma… thank you!
Lisa

[emmajoygreen]

Yet another oops.. The place must be tired after a busy weekend! I know you wanted to leave a rave review!!!! :) And (tut tut) thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

I used to work in the Galleria of Houston, TX. long ago and I enjoyed watching the skaters skating on the rink. It brought back memories reading your lively and lovely poem.

[Lisasview]

Hi Sami,
Isn't it wonderful when a simple poem can evoke so many memories..Especially the good ones!
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

I agree wholeheartedly. You are right. You are welcome.

[Neville]

.. never heard of the cameo style or form of rhyming poetry .. but then, there are many formal styles and forms with which I am ever so unfamiliar .. looks good and reads well nevertheless .. bravo :)

Neville who is never too proud, or too shy to admit he doesn't know or understand something :)

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much... Life is all about learning...right... I am onto a new form today... Wondering how it will pan out.
Lisa, at the computer

[Neville]

you are indeed more than welcome .. Neville not long off the plane and finally home :)
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you are indeed more than welcome .. Neville not long off the plane and finally home :)

[Lisasview]

Broke my clavicle and typing with my left finger..not easy..
Always nice to be home .
Lisa, dealing with the pain

[Neville]

............... ouch

[Perdition]

Wasn't that Jenny's phone number? I kid and nothing more at the rhyme scheme...have you ever been so lost in their quality on ice that you find yourself lost in emotion...almost if not in tears. Such elegance and skill brought with Swan-like beauty so amazingly that I could watch for hours as I could slow this poem down and count the syllables but I won't because one of the greatest qualities is in not knowing that presence. Just as in the hours the skaters put in as well...does that truly matter to their end quality...well, of course, it does, but to this reader and the audience it is in the flight as they leap and leave us breathless. I am sure you've probably done the same and it slows me this morning...takes me to their ice and to those tears in their Swan quality of beauty and grace midair, such as your words upon the page. I would add a "gasp" but it would echo your "my goodness" in your kind review and I do not wish to do that as it steals the quality of reaction, so thank you for this, this morning, brightly staged Lisa from sunny Spain~

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
Your reviews are so like poems themselves!!! and I do so appreciate every review you have left for me.
I was quite moved by this one as you really do get what I was after in my little Cameo poem.
Thank you so much for once agin reading and taking the time to review.
Lisa, early Saturday morning in Spain

[Perdition]

You are as talented as you are refreshing in kindness Linda from the sunniest of Spain and thank you for your towering words. Long ago I read this quote from the French poet Charles Baudelaire, who was akin to version as our own Edgar Allen Poe and when I read it, well, it has inspired me ever since, "Always be a poet, even in prose" I believe that these simplest of practices is a bit of rare advice that has carried me through the darkest, come the poet's night and has simply stuck with me ever since, especially when inspired by such poems as these to review. Namaste~

[Lisasview]

Thank you for your very kind thoughts and review.
P.S. My name is not Linda....
Lisa, in Spain

[Perdition]

Yes, it is...my computer went off on its own tangent yesterday as it will from time to time...Dictation issues are the worst. So sorry about that but then again maybe it was the Spaniard influence coming through...lol. Till the pollen settles and I am once again "alive", take care," Lisa, in Spain" and write on~

[Chris Shaw]

Exhilarating. I felt the freedom of movement. Fabulous contrast between the colour of ice (cold) and her auburn (warm) hair. Dance like no one is looking.
Wonderful brevity Lisa.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Good morning Chris,
Thank you so much of noticing the contrast ... You are so kind to really read my words and I dose appreciate it.
Lisa, early morning in Spain

[Cherrie Palmer]

If we could only live life this way. Fully committed as if no one could see.

[Lisasview]

Your review made me think... Yes, how often are given the luxury of being by ourselves, fully committed. I say this because even when we are alone doing something...we often are thinking of something else..
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Lisa ❄️

What a clean, lovely presentation, with the perfect picture to convey your theme's spirit.
In particular, I enjoy how you made the form yours by adding rhymes … stunning work!
Only hint I might offer is to use something like "streaming through" the air (or, somesuch) in L5 to sort the repeat "floating" with L2 (omit one of the 8-8 counts on your Author's Note).

Simply brilliant, Poetess … love it! : )
How about another Cameo from your crafty pen! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Thank you dear Richard for your suggestions.
I changed floating to gliding and omitted the extra 8...
Thank you so much for your positive ~ inspiring review!
I always appreciate it that you read and review my words.
Lisa, early morning in Spain

[Richard🖌]

It is an enjoyable honor.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so very much!!
Lisa

[Coyote Poetry]

I try to learn to skate. I have no balance. I love to watch the professionals figure skate. So beautiful dear Lisa. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much... I made a couple of important changes so if you have time you might like to take a second look.
Lisa

[Coyote Poetry]

Okay dear Lisa. I will. And you are welcome.

[Betty Hermelee]

I love the structure of the poem but more than that I love the words that portray a skater showing off all kinds of difficult moves…. And she is in her own world focusing o her perfect moves…not a care in the world…really enjoyable Lisa ( I used to skate at Rockefeller a Center as a kid ( not to many tricky moves) she is graceful, like a dancer, not me!
Best, B

[Lisasview]

Good morning Betty,
This is a poem that just erupted out of me... Not all of them do! I really enjoyed writing in this form...but, it is not exactly in the Cameo form. I added some rhymes, so now it is Rhyming Cameo. I plan on posting a true to form Cameo soon.
Thank you so much for your words. How wonderful that you skated... my daughter did (oh gosh, I remember being up at 4am so she could go to practice before school!)
Lisa, getting ready for a very busy day

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome, enjoy your day
Best, B

[Lisasview]

Hi Betty,
I made a couple of changes to my Cameo poem so if you have time you might like to read it again.
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

will do!!!

[Lisasview]

Thank you!

[William Michael Reeves]

Nice job referring to the phrase 'dance like no one is watching' without being obvious about it. Ice skaters do some scary things so brazen is for sure! Dangerous beautiful movement. And I just had a vision of her blades drawing her name in the ice. I judge this to be 9.9. I've never heard of the form, so I can't give you a 10. Cameo??? I'll check it out. Gold medal poetry Lisa ... still in Spain?

[Lisasview]

Hi William,
Yes, look up Cameo poetry. Such fun to write in this form... Not as easy as it looks...
This is not a true Cameo, as I put in Rhymes...my own version.
I wrote another true Cameo an will be posting it quite soon.
YES, I now live full time in Costa Blanca, Spain.
We do not plan on going back to the States.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much dear William,
I appreciate your support.
I realize that I accidentally typed 8 twice…
So it should read 2583872
So 7 lines
And. When I get home to my computer I am going to change floating … as I used it twice.
So strange that I did not catch that.🙁

[William Michael Reeves]

Your edits are great. I like the that triple rhyme at the end. Feels natural. This is like a snapshot of a bigger story and gives the reader enough to know the whole story. Good poem Lisa!

[Lisasview]

Thank you again for your thoughtful review Bill ...
You know that the triple rhyme was an accident... definetly natural...but not exactly what a Cameo is ... In a Cameo there are no rhymes. I wrote one correctly and plan to post it.
Lisa