The Stare

My first French Quatern Had fun doing this. You will see that the first line, in the first verse is repeated in the second line of the 3rd verse and so on. Eight syllables per line.

The STARE

From 'cross the room I felt his stare;

with this, I tried so not to blush.

Twink'ling green eyes beyond compare,

soft whispers filled the room with hush. 

Music began, the crowd got thick.

From 'cross the room I felt his stare.

Then, midnight's hour began to tick ...

at times like this, I dare not share. 

 

A wink, a toss of long black hair;

he lifted me close and kissed me! 

From 'cross the room I felt his stare …

laid me 'neath the secluded tree.

Loving ~ sharing hearts open wide,

feeling safe within his sweet care.

Finding feelings I could not hide …

from 'cross the room I "felt" his stare.

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

Having overlooked the accompanying picture completely (almost!) I reached into my thoughts on your very cleverly created French Quatern - and am most impressed. To have the skill and patience to produce what is such a gently flowing yet logically put post is quite 'something', Lisa. Did it take a while to have it as you wanted but all the while keeping to the recognised form? Am so impressed at both the academic side of this French Quatern and the tale it tells too. Nice stare, by the way! Just has long phone call - excuse typos!

[Lisasview]

I always love your wonderful reviews…
Thank you so much,
Lisa

[emmajoygreen]

Always a pleasure, without reading like a wine sozzled gusher.. I always enjoy what you have to say, etc. :)

[Stella Armour]

I love to read poems written in form and i really do appreciate the time and thought that goes into writing them.
This poem reminds of a pantoum format which i used to write in quite a lot and very much enjoyed.
The content is endearing and lovely ...:)

[Lisasview]

Hi Stella, I need to look up the form you mentioned…
Thank you for your much appreciated review of my newest post …
Lisa

[Stella Armour]

my pleasure Lisa .... :)

[Lisasview]

I wrote this one year ago and recently reworked it....
So if you happen to drop by please leave a review.
I always review everything I read.
Lisa

[willweb]

This was nice, I love the picture it creates in my mind and the feeling, the butterflies in the belly. Really nice.

[Lisasview]

Hello dear Will,
You reviewed this a year ago. At that time I accidentally posted this poem which I was working on.
Anyway, it is now finished and posted… wonder what you think of it now?😍 Lisa