Awaken

Awaken

A Poem by Lisasview
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My first try at writing a Ballad. Composed in Quatrans: 4-verses, Meter: Iambic Tetrameter and Iambic Trimeter rhythms. Syllable count 8/6/8/6 Rhyme scheme: abab, cdcd, etc.

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"A w a k e n !"


Surround our hearts with endless song,

across this world of lies.

Let's listen close to what went wrong;

despairing wartime cries.


Of peace, our dreams are not enough …

beneath all anger shed.

Why do we always make it tough?

Time now to move ahead.


In open hearts, it's known what’s right.

So, step out from the dark!

With every day the thousands fight,

and leave their deadly mark.


Awaken hopes today with love,

and give way to the truth.

Believe in heavens safe above …

too many lost in youth.



**✌🏼**

© 2023 Lisasview


Author's Note

Lisasview
If you happen to read this then I would greatly appreciate a review. I always review what I read.
Thank you,
Lisa

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Lisa, Lisa, Lisa!

Should I say Mona (respect for Leonardo da Vinci?) Lisa?! ... Perhaps it should be so, but shan't never of ever be told as that which is logically, intelligently, & common sense reasonably so, as in containing and astutely & aptly pertaining to realistic truth of facts revealed, rather than concealed: I, as me, a true to Life's Tree, love your writing, for all that it is, and for all that it can/, should/would/ could/will ever of, perhaps, never, be to those with essence's HEARTS possessing EYES & EARS that damn well DO SEE & HEAR! You are a true Poet, a Poet-ESS, beyond any language's portrayal of defining or description... There IS no more that I, as i, can say ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Wow, dearest Marvin... what a fabulous review...
Thank you so much... I try hard at being a g.. read more



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Hi Lisa, very great effort, may hope remain in this world.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Hope is really all we have.
Thank you for the review.
Lisa
Wow, such a rough and brave subject to write about. And how do you go about it? It seems you started in anger..understood, and that evolved into a more one on one sort of "HEY, PEOPLE/CHILDREN are DYING here, Can't we collectively do something about this? " approach. I think it's brave enough to take this subject on alone so wonderful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

I love your interesting take on my poem... And, to think I was brave to write it...
Yes, it c.. read more
Perdition

1 Year Ago

I might indeed...sounds like you were "doing time in the universal mind"...The muse or what enters o.. read more
You penned this form perfectly I love the infer from line to line ending in such a flowing rhythmic conclusion! This form lends itself to this so well I find it has a quality of authenticity in the resolve penned within the framework (a sort of old-school wisdom, like a tenet) My muddled mind doesn't do structural poems that much anymore but this makes me want to try my hand at it again:) I have always been a hybrid sort of writer i love to take bits and pieces of many forms and make "bunny" poems lol (my old pen name) but the discipline of writing in form has so many merits in forming ones own voice and yours is quite interesting

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lisasview

1 Year Ago

I am quite blown away by your outstanding review!!
Working hard on structure which as you say.. read more
This poem holds a very important advice for all us modern humans. We are so much involved with artificial world that it seems our feelings have become less real and as we try to hide our true personality in this virtual platforms, it appears to me that no longer we have the sensation and caring for abstract ideas like Peace, huminty,honesty & love.
I enjoyed reading it. Miss you a lot dear Lisa, I hope you are doing fine and I guess you might be still travelling, right?
Best Wishes
Nima

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nima.Hope

1 Year Ago

You're awlays welcome, I really like your style. A poem is truly a poem when it has rhyme, sadly rec.. read more
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Ahhh, dear Nina you are in Persia...I find it so interesting to connect here on Writers Cafe with so.. read more
Nima.Hope

1 Year Ago

Yes, I'm afraid to say I'm Iranian, because the first thing people remember from Iran is terrorism n.. read more
You posted this on what would have been my mom's 101st birthday.



Posted 1 Year Ago


Yes, dreaming of peace is not nearly enough...we need to make it happen.
We tried to back in the sixties....but somehow left the cause.
strong poem, Lisa.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Oh yes, the sixties...I remember them well.
I am happy to hear you feel this is a strong poem.. read more
I really appreciate the time you spent in getting the meter right Lisa. That can be so hard to do. But more than that, it’s the meaning you convey in your lines which is so special for me. Beautiful work as always.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Good luck with finding time. I have endless paperwork at the moment. Such a chore.
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Me too...and tomorrow is Monday..With so many calls regarding paperwork to complete.
Chore is.. read more
Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

💐………………..
This was extremely hard to write. I know how hard it was. I have tried it myself. The 8686 meter always gives a punch to the finishing lines well done carried the thought to a crescendo.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Oh my goodness Tate, I am amazed that you realise how hard this was to write... Not just because it .. read more
The message in awesome and the meter, flawless. I love this rhyming beauty, it moves effortlessly and is very song like. Wonderfully written

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Good morning Will,
Thank you for saying such nice things about my Ballad. I really appreciate.. read more
This is a timeless write. It's timeless for many reasons, which you highlight in your poem. Every line makes perfect sense, rhymes well and the message is golden. Wonderfully explained and expressed, Lisa.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Good morning,
Your response to my first effort writing a Ballad gives me chills. I wasn't su.. read more

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Added on February 19, 2023
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Benitachell, Alicante, Spain



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