My first try at writing a Ballad.
Composed in Quatrans: 4-verses, Meter: Iambic Tetrameter and Iambic Trimeter rhythms. Syllable count 8/6/8/6 Rhyme scheme: abab, cdcd, etc.
Should I say Mona (respect for Leonardo da Vinci?) Lisa?! ... Perhaps it should be so, but shan't never of ever be told as that which is logically, intelligently, & common sense reasonably so, as in containing and astutely & aptly pertaining to realistic truth of facts revealed, rather than concealed: I, as me, a true to Life's Tree, love your writing, for all that it is, and for all that it can/, should/would/ could/will ever of, perhaps, never, be to those with essence's HEARTS possessing EYES & EARS that damn well DO SEE & HEAR! You are a true Poet, a Poet-ESS, beyond any language's portrayal of defining or description... There IS no more that I, as i, can say ...
Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham
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1 Year Ago
Wow, dearest Marvin... what a fabulous review...
Thank you so much... I try hard at being a g.. read moreWow, dearest Marvin... what a fabulous review...
Thank you so much... I try hard at being a good poetess...never seems like I have enough time.
Recently broke my clavicle... a real nightmare..
Lisa
i really appreciate this poem. first, the rhyme and meter was also well done. i found myself bouncing along. and perhaps chanting this poem for the world to hear might be a good idea, for it has a powerful message that is extremely relevant today. the engine of war is running at full speed... but only because we fuel it. love is what stops this hideous machine, something that is far too scarce.
Ps listen on Spotify
To skeeter Davis song called end of the world link below
https://open.spotify.com/track/5DTOOkooKFUvWj1XQTFa09?si=XmKuXgPsTle18ZvJp-03Sg
Well said and wonderfully written! All of mankind needs to stop glorifying war and wake up to the realities of it, the lives lost, the destruction it causes, and the devastation it creates.
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1 Year Ago
What nice things to say. I believe this is your first review of any of my work and I do appreciate i.. read moreWhat nice things to say. I believe this is your first review of any of my work and I do appreciate it.
You might like Innocence ...full of metaphors...
Thank you,
Lisa
Love the structure and rhythm. Great message and powerful imagery and and emotions.
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1 Year Ago
Wow, when I make a suggestion you are right there... I thought you might like it...Hope you will fin.. read moreWow, when I make a suggestion you are right there... I thought you might like it...Hope you will find time to read more... I have quite a verity... So, I will reccoment another one that I especially like as it is full of metaphors...
Innocence.
Thank you again,
Lisa
This is brilliant! Many poets seem to get lost in the meter and syllables and the poem itself loses its essence. But you have managed to avoid this common mistake. Kudos on creating such a wonderful piece.
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1 Year Ago
Hi Raven,
Interesting that you say that about meter, etc. I for one really love structure mos.. read moreHi Raven,
Interesting that you say that about meter, etc. I for one really love structure most of the time..I feel that it comes naturally to me... However, this piece was written in the structure of a Ballad poem and so it seems to flow better.
I wrote this out all at once with very few corrections (in commas, etc.) I found the perfect image to set off my poem and I think this is probably one of my most favourites...
I am delighted to know that you like it. I believe I looked at you this morning, but I believe you only write stories... and I am so limited on time so I did not read any ...I think that was you??
Lisa
1 Year Ago
Hi Lisa!
Yes, I am a huge fan of meter and structure as well. And if it comes naturally to y.. read moreHi Lisa!
Yes, I am a huge fan of meter and structure as well. And if it comes naturally to you, you are one of the rare poets of our time. Do you have any favorite contemporary poets?
Yes that was me. I haven't posted any poems here because I'm not very confident about their quality. Will post if I write something worthy.
Raven
1 Year Ago
Good Raven,
Thank you for your very kind review. Sometimes structure come very easily to me .. read moreGood Raven,
Thank you for your very kind review. Sometimes structure come very easily to me and other times I spend forever on a poem.
I have no problem with a thought or with metaphors. I recently posted Wilted Soul which I wrote in 1968 when i was 20. I had absolutely no education in writing at that time and only recently got some help in structure, etc.
Lisa
1 Year Ago
Hi Lisa,
Whoa that's a long time ago! I'm going to check it out right now.
Raven
Oh good...I actually have several old ones from 55 years ago posted...
HOPE, PUSH, SCREAMS an.. read moreOh good...I actually have several old ones from 55 years ago posted...
HOPE, PUSH, SCREAMS and CRY are some...
I seek to add this grand piece to my Library of FAVORITES, but, sadly, the site will not allow me to do so ... if I read a piece of anybody's nobody's writing, and I I find that I respect and love it, then, then, not now of ("What the f**k!") ever when, I do, upon that moment of daring to comment in full honesty of my own personality, do seek to add such said pieces to my personal Library as FAVORITES upon & on this WritersCafe.org website ... Always have, always will, always shall, until my life runs still, breathless & essence-less ...
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1 Year Ago
Sometimes the site can be tricky... I did recently find that i can share the poem I like to my email.. read moreSometimes the site can be tricky... I did recently find that i can share the poem I like to my email and from there copy and paste to wherever I like..
I do remember last year that you were saving my work to your library... really so flattering..
Lisa
I have been writing poetry and short stories since I was 10..so 64 years!
I have never connected with any groups but recently thought why not..
So here I ..looking at where this adventure leads me. more..