Rainbow Ribbons

Another Sonnet Forest-rainbow by artist Don-Prioleau.

  Ra i n b o w  R i b b o n s

      Like moments scattered ~ loose pearls on the floor

      catch rainbow ribbons in their shiny glaze.

      Bewitching, sweet, her scent like none before;

      desires move love thru earthy rhythmic days.

      

      As hearts see twilight sooner than appears,

      clear sleepy dewdrops linger on lush leaves;

      as quietly they fall … sad empty tears

      left longing for those times when she believes.

      

      Forever taunted by blind jealousies ...

      alone, she'd wasted of life's precious time;

      now, finding pathways to my memories,

      my love for her will always deeply chime.

      

      Again, I yearn to hold her in my arms …

      ahhh, lost once more in her embracing charms.

                  ---~-~≈·§·≈~-~---

Author's Note

Hoping if you read my words you will find the time to review.
I respond to all reviews.

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa,

Most magically and romantically enchanting, as well as contempatively meditative over a steaming (erotically steaming?) cup of hot coffee this fine Thor's-day morning here in good ole Smalltown, West Texas where the best Poetry we daily get to see is dust blown to mouth and stuck in teeth ... What an exemplary blessing it is, always of always shall be, to visit your pages set to pen of page, and that from your exquisitely thoughtful heart ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Good morning dear Marvin,
Yes, each day brings with it new thoughts combined with memories...and with that perhaps a poem is born. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my words. It means a lot to me.
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

A soft and heartfelt sonnet about love and loss….I love the description of “rainbow ribbons in their shiny glaze…”. There is some sadness felt, although the writer emphasizes memories “ the dewdrops linger” a beautiful and meaningful notion…..you show us magical images throughout from beginning to end….word choice is excellent, it flows throughout…...
Best.
B.

[Lisasview]

Dearest Betty,
Wow, what a beautiful description of my little sonnet. I started writing it a couple of months ago before I got sick and only posted it a couple of days ago...I need to work on another poem I began several months ago, Stripteaser and post it as well.
Thank you again,
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Lisa, glad you're back at the Cafe!!!
Best, B

[Sami Khalil]

A beautiful sonnet filled with magical imagery. I felt some sadness, perhaps to a lost mom. Keep that memory alive and that embrace strong. Life is short indeed. Hope is long.
Wonderful Lisa!

[Lisasview]

Hi Sami,
Keeping a memory alive is so special. This happens through conversation, story telling, words on paper, and music.
I am delighted you liked my little sonnet.
Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

I agree. You are welcome Lisa!

[Chris Shaw]

How lovely is your rainbow ribbons. So gentle and softly spoken is this sonnet of loss. A beautiful composition. Quite masterful dear Lisa. Thank you. The effort put into writing sonnets and getting the flow right is well worth the reward. Have a great Saturday.

Chris

[Lisasview]

I so appreciate that you understand the effort I went through working on this sonnet.
Thank you so much for your very kind words.
I really appreciate you dear Chris,
Lisa

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Lisa... a beautiful Sonnet inspired perhaps by broken Pearls.
Here in Fredericksburg, Virginia by the Rappahannock River
the sunrise often glistens on the placid water... as silver Terns
sit on rocks where Rainbow colors reflect lost love... gently, Pat

[Lisasview]

Thank you dear Pat for your beautiful review!
Loved it,
Lisa

[W. Barrett Munn]

Lisa, I love it that you have moved on from writing in perfect iambs and are now mix in other feet and non-stressed syllables. It makes your writing flow so effortlessly and musically that way.

In this offering my only tiny quibble would be to go ahead and write “twilight earlier than appears” than try to force an iamb from “twilight early than appears” or use “sooner” instead of early.

These are small quibbles. Overall I thought it was terrific!

Winston

[Lisasview]

Well, as far as I could tell this little sonnet of mine is in perfect iambs...
I would appreciate a breakdown of where you find this to be untrue...
Lisa

[W. Barrett Munn]

Hi. I sent my anwer to you in this site's mail as the comment and scansion combined were too long to post here in comments and too hard to see the scansion marks in these little boxes.

[Lisasview]

Saw it...need to go over it..

[LuvFlyer Creations]

This is amazing! Nice job!!

[Lisasview]

Thank you for reading and reviewing.
I think this is the first one of mine that you have reviewed??
I appreciate it,
Lisa, now in Spain

[willweb]

The beauty of nature, which is always all around us, is only enhanced by the beauty of your poem. Very nicely done.

[Lisasview]

Hi Will,
Wow what a lovely thing to say!! I really appreciate your reviews/
Thank you for reading my words,
Lisa

[lightsong]

If I didn't already know that the writer is You, I would thought it was Richard! and when I say this I mean this is a masterpiece of a Sonnet! the chosen words, the ideas, the imagination, the expressions, the feelings.... all are perfect coming to bond all together into a perfect sonnet. Bravo dear Lisa!

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Richard always has a watchful eye over what I write and helps me make my sonnets even better.
If you like I can message you what I originally wrote.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my work. Saying such wonderful things warms my heart.
Hugs,
Lisa

[lightsong]

I know how Syr Richard teaches his students, what I said was not a comparison but a compliment of how wonderful You are writing Sonnets. Message me with anything You wish for dear Lisa :>