Butterfly Kisses

I wrote this poem using Richards Five 'n Eights original form. Perhaps some of you do not know what Butterfly Kisses are. My mother taught me. We put our eyes together and fluttered our lashes.

Butterfly Kisses....

Butterfly kisses,

lovers’ lip blisses,

whispered promises to neglect.

Moments disappear,

hopefulness looms near …

  is there enough time to reflect?

A brief rendezvous;

then, one says, "Adieu …"

hurtful feelings left on love's bed.

Sheer curtains spread open,

unkind words spoken …

  thoughts that never should have been said.

Tear~ending morning,

came without warning!

Alone again, standing undressed.

Too late to find out

love's kiss was in doubt …

our time is now no longer blessed.

-~·🦋·~-

Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would appreciate it if you would be kind enough to review it. I always review every poem I read...

Reviews

[willweb]

I suppose they all cannot be happy endings. What begins as such a euphoric situation somehow breaks down and one floats away while the other lingers behind lonely. I like the rhyme scheme on your poem, it flows very smoothly and is song like to me. Very nicely crafted.

[Lisasview]

Good morning Will,
Your lovely review reached me early this cool morning here in Spain.... It was a delight to read your thoughts.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my work... I do so appreciate it. I am thinking you might enjoy the first Sonnet I ever wrote ... Hand~In~Hand or Cry...
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

Sometimes brief rendezvous' breakup is as painful as longer ones, no doubt they all hurt us in some way. Your rhyme scheme in this poem is amazing and powerful on it's own; "hurt feelings left on one's bed", that's the worst; so sentimentally sad... it may have been doubtful from the beginning that this would work out...
lovely images, even though sad....
Best, B

[Lisasview]

Thank you Betty for your kind review....Brief rendezvous seldom work..and as you said are often just as painful as long term relationships.
I always appreciate your reviews.
Lisa, late afternoon in Spain

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Lisa; if our govt. leads us the wrong way, we might be in Spain or Portugal!!!!
I hear Porto is very nice, trying it our in Sept!
Best, B

[Lisasview]

We have been to Porto but loved Lisbon way more...
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

been to Lisbon, not to Porto, flight from Azores (2 hours, not bad!)

[Lisasview]

So you are first going to the Azores...

[Patricia Wedel]

Fluttering lashes like Butterfly 🦋 kisses … enticing as waves splashing on the Sea. Lovers feel the Caress of passion … where a Bed of flowers is only a place to sip the Nectar … and fly away. We will bloom again another day. tenderly, Pat

[Lisasview]

Hi Pat, You dear ~ sweet reviews are like beautiful poems themselves!!
Thank you,
Lisa, almost 8:30pm, in Spain

[Stella Armour]

"unkind words spoken …

thoughts that never should have been said."
I like these two lines , they are often the kiss of death when spoken.
Butterfly kisses are so tender and sweet, a lovely way showing affection

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Stella for taking the time to read and review my little poem.. I was so thrilled to find what I feel is the perfect image for my poem...
Lisa, afternoon in Spain

[Stella Armour]

I once had a butterfly land on my knee and it ticked just like butterfly kisses .... i was so enthralled i dare not move

[Lisasview]

Oh yes, I have had butterflies land on me and it was so wonderful!!

[Dave Brown]

we too are having a butterfly affair although ours is with the real thing
Although our bee population has been badly affected this year, the butterflies have arrived en masse

[Lisasview]

What fun... we have not seen any butterflies here since we moved from California two year ago and I do so miss them...
Hope you liked my little poem,
Lisa

[Chris Shaw]

A brief affair. Wonderful while it lasts but so hurtful when one says farewell or even worse doesn't say anything. Butterflies, fleeting beauty. Here one minute gone the next. Only the memories left. Beautiful work Lisa. Happy days in Spain.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Hi Chris, thank you so much for your wonderful review... I just love what you said... Butterflies, fleeting beauty. "Here one minute gone the next. Only the memories left." You and I are often on the same page...
Lisa, in really hot Spain

[Neville]

this is really cool Lisa .. but then that's what would one expect from the faint fan like breeze of fluttered lids between lovers on an otherwise calm sunny day ... actually it's a FAB poem any old day of the week really ................ Neville ready for tea :)

[Lisasview]

Just about to watch a movie with another glass of red wine...
Lisa, not getting drunk

[Neville]

very sensible Lisa :)

[Lisasview]

That's the way I am...well, most of the time.
Lisa, just finished breakfast

[Neville]

that must have been a very big glass of red wine :)

[Lisasview]

Well 3 medium ones...so I guess that is one very big one.
Lisa, almost time for dinner...red fish on the barbecue and steamed beet tops.

[Birdwithapen]

I love the use of a different language in your poem. It always makes me feel more intrigued to figure out what it means if I dont already know, then making me even more intrigued in the poem itself. This is truly a masterpiece.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem. So wonderful that you were intrigued to figure out the meaning!! I enjoy using metaphors in my poems..hidden meanings are alway great. You might enjoy Nymph. I started posting for the very first time a few months ago although I have been writing for a very long time.
Saying my work s a masterpiece is so very nice of you.
Lisa, now in Spain

[W. Barrett Munn]

I would never have the courage to write in an aabccb rhyme scheme for fear of the sound being too close to the rhymes of my childhood. That you could do it is quite a feat.
W

[Lisasview]

Good morning from Spain,
I enjoy structure and find it fun to work on something that is challenging. All of this is rather new to me.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Lisa, now in Spain

[W. Barrett Munn]

Yes, structure should be like the light pencil drawing you then use to guide your painting.
Slant rhyme will help rhyme be less jarring, and placing rhymes further apart as in axxa bxxb scheme also helps. Keep having fun with it. Poetry is a great outlet.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

This is a sad piece of your heart set to pen of page in, what does appear to be, writing of a love now lost, a love, thus, become unrequited and relegated to that shelf upon which we place our dreams, our hopes, our aspirations, and our memories of better times ... Beautifully done ...!

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Hi Marvin, your beautiful and inspiring review is so very appreciated!
Your words mean a lot to me.
Lisa, after 6pm in Spain

[Cherrie]

...and we long for mother's tender
Butterfly 🦋 kiss.
Excellent piece of a fleeting moment spoiled by morning Light.
Now, there is a poem in that. 🖊

[Lisasview]

You are so right dear Cherrie, so many of us long for that Butterfly Kiss... Thank you so very much for reading and reviewing my little poem about love.
Lisa, dealing with the heat here in Spain

[Ken e Bujold]

I love your exquisite sense of the old rhyming patterns Lisa, it is a form not many try anymore. I read an earlier review which spoke of lacking the courage to attempt it. Personally I don't know if it's courage so much as a rebellion against the discipline of confinement to the strict scan of lines. I attempt it at times, but rarely succeed in making work. I envy your mastery