Nymph

My Nymph poem was composed using Richards original 'Five 'n Eight" form. I really enjoyed writing using this form.

   Nymph....

Every curve just right,

she moves out of sight ...

beneath tall trees, he gleams a glimpse!

Sweet body reflects

butterfly effects;

she skips unaware, like a Nymph.

Through branches entwined,

he trails close behind …

golden pond scene, quite glorious!

Maidens splash about,

swimming in 'n out;

watching, feeling victorious.

Transfixed, he gazes ...

what's seen amazes;

hidden secrets need to be kept.

"Naiad, have you gone,

or bathing 'til dawn?"

Soaked in dreams; alas, overslept....

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Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would appreciate a review.
I always leave reviews,
Lisa

Reviews

[Perdition]

I believe I may have glimpsed a time or two myself up by the waterfalls. She sounds wonderful. Something again in the form though that just gets to me at times...hard to explain. I enjoyed reading this, of course, but ever since the arrival of Whitman and Dickinson and The Beats and Jack and Bukowski...it is that form that reaches me. Don't get me wrong you've found your voice and I'm still leap-frogging from here to there and back again so I am enjoying and appreciate all suggestions. You only have to look at my latest one to see that there is meaning but....lol. I'll be back with another I wrote this morning ..transcendence comes at a price so they say. Thanks Lisa!!

[Lisasview]

Hell,
This is a form designed by Richard and I really loved it and I have written quite a few poems using it.
Trying to figure to what you mean when you say that the form gets you at times???
Now I am off to read some of yours...
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hello...opps...

[Betty Hermelee]

A lovely dream of Naiad, the sea nymph; The form is perfect; the soft images are so relevant to the photo....at first. one is not sure it is a dream, but the twist at the end shows you so..."soaked in dreams, alas overslept".... well done Lisa....
best, B

[Lisasview]

Hi Betty,
I really loved writing this and although until I reached the word glimpse I had no idea where my poem would lead me and was happily surprised when out of the blue my Nymph showed up!!
Thank you so much for your kind review..
Lisa, working on my computer

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Lisa!

[Chris Shaw]

The five 'n eight form is certainly original Lisa. A good Monday morning to you. I enjoyed this write immensely.as the he in your poem spied such wonderful delights as your maidens bathed :) Your posted image, did that come before the write or afterwards? Have a great day.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Hi Chris,
I just started to write it and wen I got to the word glimpse and was trying to think of a good rhyming word..Nymph came to mind..and so my poem took on a life of its own.. I also wrote 3 more using Richards poetic form... I really enjoyed the journey..
About to have a late lunch (nearly 4pm here) and red wine.. The wine here is amazing...
Then, I plan to respond to reviews, etc..
How is your day going?
Lisa

[Chris Shaw]

Busy busy and I shouldn't really be here at all :)) Enjoy your vino

[Lisasview]

Ha ha.. can't help ourselves..can we?

[Robert Haigh]

A delightful dream-poem! Beautifully described in an easy flowing rhythm. A joy to read!

[Lisasview]

Good morning Robert,
I got carried away with the thought ...and my pen did the rest..
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
I plan to post 3 new poems in the next few days using the same poetic structure.
Lisa, on the computer waiting for Bob to finish making our green drink...

[CD Campbell]

I like this form. It seems to me to be rather challenging. It would be so easy for it to stutter in the 5 line when going to the 8 and then going back to the 5. You'd have to get the cadence right with the stress on certain words. I'm glad you pulled it off. As far as the subject goes, I love old folklore in poetry. One of my favorite poems is the Stolen Child from W.B. Yeats. Faeries, Dryads, naiads, thumbs up. I think this is a really fun, outstanding poem. Have a good day or night, Lisa.

[Lisasview]

Good morning from Spain,
Thank you so much for your great review CD..
I really enjoyed writing in this form and have three more I plan to post in the next day or two... Calypso Strings, Butterfly Kisses and Game On...all using this form...I find it rather wonderful that you know what Nymphs and Naiads are.. Many who have read my poem do not.. I was hoping the image I used might help...I am going to look up Stolen Child..Thank you for that.
Lisa, on my computer

[John the Baptist]

It would very nice to have such dreams. Alas, when I come upon the nymph, the alarm clock always rings.

[Lisasview]

Ha ha..
So, John, did you enjoy the poem?
Lisa

[John the Baptist]

Yes, I did. Your imagery is very descriptive and your storyline is tight.

[Cailin]

Lovely! I can picture the scene as I read.

[Lisasview]

Good morning Cailin,
Glad you liked the image I posted but I am wondering what you thought of my poem?
Lisa, now in Spain

[Cailin]

Good morning, Lisa.
My comment was associated with your writing. The photo you posted with it is not what I picture when reading your stanzas, though it is a fine depiction.
Have a wonderful day!
Cailin

[Red Brick Keshner]

A glimpse that gleams will not remain a glimpse quite soon! Ah, and he's trailing her now. And then the transfixed state. Quite in keeping with the siren and nymph stories of the Greek myths and legends. Thanks for sharing, Lisa. /Frederick.

[Lisasview]

Hi Freds,
I really enjoyed writing this...Had no idea where the first two lines would lead me and then all of a sudden I was at the pond... Funny how I am carried away...
Some say it is my Muse... who knows..
Thank you for reading and reviewing..
lisa

[Red Brick Keshner]

A pond, something so accessible, and still so quietly pretty, yes. The Muse has style and grace.

[lightsong]

A fine superior poem my dear, You've mastered the form that if I read it without knowing it is You, I would think it is Richards' poem, maybe the twist at the end that I would stop and say (maybe it's not him?!).

Aren't You a beautiful Nymph? You should be proud of this one.

[Lisasview]

Nope... not Richards... My idea and my poem...
I is his structure which I found to be such fun..
Such a sweet thing to say about my being the Nymph... you are too kind..
Hugs, Lisa home now...

[lightsong]

Oh my dear! I know it's yours I was only complimenting You for how wonderfully You mastered Richards' form. I hope You didn't get me wrong.

Welcome home 💓

[Lisasview]

No worries my dearest... This form was quite a challenge but I really love it...

[lightsong]

You did GREAT💓

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much..
I feel like I am addicted to the computer!!

[lightsong]

You are not alone, We all feel that sometimes ☺️

[William Michael Reeves]

This felt like a chapter in a longer story. Have you written about your mothe...nymph in previous poems? Is 'he' your dad? Maybe this is how Lisa came to be, here on Earth somewhere now in Spain. I like the forms Richard has developed too.

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
No I have not written poems about my mother the Nymph before and no he is not my dad...but yes this could be a story...Not sure if you liked my poem or not?
Lisa, 7am in Spain

[William Michael Reeves]

I have mixed feelings about it. I liked the subject and the story you told and the poem itself. But I don't like the structure. Bringing the one word back to the margin. I find it distracting and keep wanting to see if those words together were something. Just my personal taste about structure. You definitely picked up on my not liking something. That's what it was.

[Temperance]

You’re right Lisa, I do like this one! Surprise at the end. He was dreaming of the his Nymph. What a great dream it was although, she remained elusive. Well done! Temp

[Lisasview]

Good morning Temp,
I really enjoyed writing this poem... The whole idea of tNymphs and Naiads is so intriguing... Hoping to post two more new ones.. But there are still loads of my poems I do not think you have read. Did you read Innocence? It is the most unusual poem I have ever written ~ full of metaphors...
Lisa, early in Spain

[Temperance]

I’m not sure if I’ve read it yet but will go looking for it.