Nymph

My Nymph poem was composed using Richards original 'Five 'n Eight" form. I really enjoyed writing using this form.

   Nymph....

Every curve just right,

she moves out of sight ...

beneath tall trees, he gleams a glimpse!

Sweet body reflects

butterfly effects;

she skips unaware, like a Nymph.

Through branches entwined,

he trails close behind …

golden pond scene, quite glorious!

Maidens splash about,

swimming in 'n out;

watching, feeling victorious.

Transfixed, he gazes ...

what's seen amazes;

hidden secrets need to be kept.

"Naiad, have you gone,

or bathing 'til dawn?"

Soaked in dreams; alas, overslept....

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Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would appreciate a review.
I always leave reviews,
Lisa

Reviews

[Perdition]

I believe I may have glimpsed a time or two myself up by the waterfalls. She sounds wonderful. Something again in the form though that just gets to me at times...hard to explain. I enjoyed reading this, of course, but ever since the arrival of Whitman and Dickinson and The Beats and Jack and Bukowski...it is that form that reaches me. Don't get me wrong you've found your voice and I'm still leap-frogging from here to there and back again so I am enjoying and appreciate all suggestions. You only have to look at my latest one to see that there is meaning but....lol. I'll be back with another I wrote this morning ..transcendence comes at a price so they say. Thanks Lisa!!

[Lisasview]

Hell,
This is a form designed by Richard and I really loved it and I have written quite a few poems using it.
Trying to figure to what you mean when you say that the form gets you at times???
Now I am off to read some of yours...
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hello...opps...

[supernova_thoughts]

Ahhh.. The Greek Mythology and the beautiful way of putting it. This form suits you. Pleasing write.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much... I really loved writing this...and I was delighted to find just the perfect image...
I grew up believing in fairies, etc...
Lisa, now in Spain

[MsJewel]

I have found that at times when trying to follow a certain form or strict word count, creativity gets lost. However, no so in this piece! This is lovely! The artwork you chose is perfect as well. Beautifully done. :)Julie

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my words.
I have always written just the way I feel... I have had no training until 7 months ago. I did not realise until then that I actually write in a sort of structured way..
But as it turns out I never lose my creativity by following the strict structure..I actually have found that it enhances what I already have written down.
I so appreciate your open thoughts about all this.
I just love the image I found and I am delighted that you like it too. Really is so perfect for my words.
Lisa, now living in Spain

[W. Barrett Munn]

I enjoyed this, Lisa. The form adds a nice rhythm. As for form, no less of stature than Emily Dickinson wrote in form. I only have one question and it is just that, a question and not a criticism: Why do you chose to use (‘n) when the word (and) has the same emphasis and syllable count? Thanks.
Winston

[Lisasview]

Glad you enjoyed my poem and the form...
To answer your question about why I used ('n) instead of (and) ....
"For smoother poetic voice and rhythm."
"swimming in and out" ("and" is a separately "pronounced" filler word)
"swimming in 'n out" ('n is part of the rhythmic motion)
Lisa, going over my reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

Thank you for the explanation.
Winston

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome.
Lisa

[Norma M Sutton]

I'm not familiar with the form you used, but greatly enjoyed reading it.

[Lisasview]

I learned the form and wrote quite a few poems using it... I so enjoyed it!!
You might enjoy Butterfly Kisses or Calypso Strings..
I used the form in those as well...
LIsa

[Norma M Sutton]

I'm not familiar with the form you used, but greatly enjoyed reading it.

[Lisasview]

Thank you again for taking the time to read and review my little poem..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Fabian G. Franklin]

What a nice tribute to Greek mythology and some of its more elusive characters; the dryads, naiads and nymphs. I was waiting for Pan to make an appearance! I read the funniest book about Pan by Blowing Rock, North Carolina native, Tom Robbins, called Jitterbug Perfume (1984). His books are an artform unlike anything else in print anywhere. I love Tom. Reading any of his novels is a surreal experience. Be forewarned, they are very unconventional, nonconformist and not for the faint of heart or mind. Still, he has written nine bestsellers. Tom turned ninety just this July. I enjoyed your poem. Keep up the great work. F.

[Lisasview]

Good morning dear Fabian,
I really enjoyed writing this poem in this form...It actually came easily to me.
Thank you for reading and reviewing (not everyone reviews!) And, thank you for the very interesting information.
I will look Tom up...
Lisa, now in Tarragona, Spain on a short holiday

[Patricia Wedel]

Dearest Lisa… a Nymph is like an Iris with soft flowing Petals that spread when kissed with an early rain… dancing in romantic rhyme. gently, Pat

[Lisasview]

Dear pat,
I just loved writing this poem... Brought back memories as a child believing in all this and fairies too... My mother told us there were such lovely creatures about....
Lisa, need to clean house

[Patricia Wedel]

Yes, Fairies are all about .. especially where flowers grow like Children with Wings that 🎶 sing lullabies…. dearly, Pat

[Lisasview]

Such lovely thoughts...dear Pat

[alanwgraham]

Very nice Lisa. Well done for creating this lovely poem according to this special form. It is a challenge but it gives you a great feeling of achievement.
All the best,
Alan

[Lisasview]

Thank you so very much dear Alan..
I really enjoyed writing this poem...it really just flowed out of me. I find this form easy for me. But I do use several other forms as well. Thank you for your very kind review.
I do appreciate it.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Brad Dehler]

Very good. The humor, the excitement and mystery. Well said, love the play on words, imagery and fun. Every curve just right,

she moves out of sight ...

beneath tall trees, he gleams a glimpse! Again- good intrigue to this.

[Lisasview]

Hi Brad, wow, you are on a role... Okay, so this is one of my most favourite poems... My mother was English and I grew up believing in fairies and nymphs...I was so happy to find the colourful image...and I so enjoyed writing this in a particular poetic format structure.
I wrote Innocence which is full of metaphors and is again one of my most favourites.. takes some doing to figure it out.. but if you do read it be sure to read my notes..
Thank you,
Lisa

[Perry]

Hi Lisa, Yes, I love this poem. Total enchantment. Voyeuristically delightful.

Perry

[Lisasview]

Hi Perry,
Delighted that you love my little poem! Thank you so much for taking the time to read it...
Lisa, early morning in Spain