Nymph

My Nymph poem was composed using Richards original 'Five 'n Eight" form. I really enjoyed writing using this form.

   Nymph....

Every curve just right,

she moves out of sight ...

beneath tall trees, he gleams a glimpse!

Sweet body reflects

butterfly effects;

she skips unaware, like a Nymph.

Through branches entwined,

he trails close behind …

golden pond scene, quite glorious!

Maidens splash about,

swimming in 'n out;

watching, feeling victorious.

Transfixed, he gazes ...

what's seen amazes;

hidden secrets need to be kept.

"Naiad, have you gone,

or bathing 'til dawn?"

Soaked in dreams; alas, overslept....

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Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would appreciate a review.
I always leave reviews,
Lisa

Reviews

[Perdition]

I believe I may have glimpsed a time or two myself up by the waterfalls. She sounds wonderful. Something again in the form though that just gets to me at times...hard to explain. I enjoyed reading this, of course, but ever since the arrival of Whitman and Dickinson and The Beats and Jack and Bukowski...it is that form that reaches me. Don't get me wrong you've found your voice and I'm still leap-frogging from here to there and back again so I am enjoying and appreciate all suggestions. You only have to look at my latest one to see that there is meaning but....lol. I'll be back with another I wrote this morning ..transcendence comes at a price so they say. Thanks Lisa!!

[Lisasview]

Hell,
This is a form designed by Richard and I really loved it and I have written quite a few poems using it.
Trying to figure to what you mean when you say that the form gets you at times???
Now I am off to read some of yours...
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Hello...opps...

[E.P. Robles]

Through the vivid imagery and rhythmic flow of your poem, there exudes an aura of mystique and enchantment, appealing to the reader's poetic sensibilities.
In the opening stanza, two elusive figures engage in a playful encounter, their alluring presence accentuated by phrases like "Every curve just right" and "she moves out of sight."

The inclusion of towering trees and a fleeting glimpse of the male figure creates an air of intrigue and sets the natural stage.

The second stanza introduces the butterfly effect as a symbol of the transformative power embodied by the woman.

Her carefree skipping, reminiscent of a nymph, conveys innocence and a profound connection to nature. Sensual and joyous, the imagery evoking water, such as the "golden pond scene" and the "Maidens splash about, swimming in 'n out," further enhances the captivating atmosphere.

I often use psychoanalyis in my review of poetry. So, in viewing the poem through the lens of Carl Jung this exercise adds another layer of psychological and symbolic depth. The woman becomes a representation of the anima, the feminine archetype within the male psyche. She personifies the enigmatic, sensual, and unconscious aspects of the male protagonist's inner world.

The male figure trailing behind the woman signifies his pursuit of the feminine qualities latent within himself. The mention of hidden secrets suggests a journey into the depths of the unconscious, an exploration of profound self-discovery. The poignant query, "Naiad, have you gone, or bathing 'til dawn?" reflects a yearning to comprehend and integrate this feminine aspect into his conscious awareness.

Overall, the poem captures a fleeting moment of enchantment and fascination with the feminine, inviting readers to delve into its poetic interpretation and venture into the realm of the psyche.

It encourages contemplation of the interplay between conscious and unconscious elements of the self, as well as the transformative potential that lies in embracing the feminine archetype.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

This is inspiring
This puts my writing back in pre school and you in university !! The layout the words
The visuals descriptives the font and even colour of ink

Well done loved it Lisa !
Art is fitting too

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Dear Lisasview,
I loved the prose,
Wence chiverled (woo) it is so hard to keep what owns a mystic nymph
is my identification, to your pale-poem, within the water and the butterflies
yet, the maidens wins it all, a dishearten to a reader,
but in literature, it stands withstanding, beautiful dissolution, at odds,
but everlasting fable. Great Writ! ----1809 Black Plague December

[Lisasview]

I had such fun writing this.. I grew up believing in such things.. I attribute this to my dear mother... who often spoke of fairy rings beneath her trees..
Thank you for your very kind review.
Lisa

[1809 Black Plague December]

most welcome Dear, I hope you continue writing, fabulosa (a tale of a child's creative mind with characters that do not exist to the common mind),
Maynard

[Lisasview]

Oh yes, no one can ever stop me from writing...
I love it...
Lisa

[Pete]

very nice. playful and telling. the good thing about dreams is that they are ours ... :)

[Lisasview]

Hi Pete,
Here we go again, with another one that you reviewed that never got a thank you... Again, so strange because I remember reading your review and was quite sure I had immediately responded.. Glad I am going back over my poems today and checking.
So, a huge thank you for reading what I write and responding...with a kind review,
Lisa, working at my computer today in Spain

[Scott Kris]

How many dreams I have spent in these waters…. Ha.

I enjoyed the playful poetry.

Scott

[Lisasview]

Hi Scott,
I really enjoyed writing this poem...Glad you enjoyed it.
Lisa, early morning here in Spain

[willweb]

Love the poem and the ending caught me dreaming I believe because it was not something I saw coming. This was playful and fun to read Lisa. Thanks for sharing your wonderful poems.

[Lisasview]

This is another one dear Will that I loved writing..
I grew up believing in things like this to be true.
I so appreciate your review.
Thank you so much,
Lisa, still in Spain

[Miss Sharon]

(Transfixed, he gazes ...what's seen amazes;) Allows the readers' imagination to go wild! Love it. ~Sharon

[Lisasview]

Hi Sharon,
this was so much fun to write. I felt the words just flowed out of me... with ho thought.
Thank you so much for your great review.
Lisa, still in Spain

[Coyote Poetry]

Years ago. I was a bit loco once. I would walk the wet sea Monterey rocks for two miles on a Friday night.
Once, a beautiful creature showed up and we talked. I do believe in the goddesses of the sea dear Lisa.
"Transfixed, he gazes ...
what's seen amazes;
hidden secrets need to be kept.
"Naiad, have you gone,
or bathing 'til dawn?"
Soaked in dreams; alas, overslept."
I adored the above lines. Thank you dear Lisa for sharing the amazing poetry. You took me back to a good night.
Coyote

[Lisasview]

Wow, three amazing reviews from you in a row!!
I grew up believing in fairies and nymphs...read moreWow, three amazing reviews from you in a row!!
I grew up believing in fairies and nymphs...
I loved writing this..
Lisa

[Coyote Poetry]

I still do dear Lisa. I was saved by the devil and by god. When we don't believe in myth and tale. What do we have left?

[Lisasview]

Your words made me smile... and, you are so right...
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

A delight to read and a flight to imagine. Nicely flowing with wondrous images. I see you are expanding your horizon and that is appreciated.
Long live Lisa in Spain.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Sami for reading and reviewing my work.

I really appreciate it...read moreThank you so much Sami for reading and reviewing my work.

I really appreciate it...
Lisa...loving it here in Spain

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome in any language.

[Lisasview]

I am from California...my Spanish is so so...

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe...Was just kidding....

[Sami Khalil]

All wonderful things.................

[Lisasview]

Absolutely.....