Forevermore

Rhyming Quatrains with a Rhyming Couplet envoi poem regarding thoughts of death... Grateful to Richard for finding the perfect artwork for my poem and helping me along my journey writing poetry.

   

     Forevermore....

Lie me down on a bed of lavender;

naked, I will be in the blazing sun.

Upon death, to this earth I surrender …

for, my journey here with you is now done.

Remember my laughter in ocean's waves …

floating along with no care in the world.

As we hid inside of deep dark sea caves,

our eyes met softly, as blue waters swirled.

Kissing your salty neck, I held on tight

with loving thoughts....I drift to you again,

watching day's sun disappear into night,

knowing our true love's depth would never wane.

Beyond life, to your open arms I soar;

our souls entwine now ~ and forevermore....

Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would so appreciate a review.
I always review.. Each line has 10 syllables.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

One of your finest works, Lisa🍷

Whoever said sadness and death have no beauty, never read this.
It was great working together with you in formulating this creatively gorgeous piece.

Many memorable blessings shared … thank you always, Ma'am! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
Great to get a review from you. This is one of my most favorite poems I have written.
Of course I have been thinking of you….and even more in the past couple of days.
My plan was to message you… and, and I will…
~ Lisa

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A very romantic piece that seems calculated to fit a certain syllable count. I want to read the lines without the superfluous additions seemingly deployed for that purpose. What I mean is, "for, my journey here with you is now done." Could be shortened to "for my journey with you is done" since one cannot be anywhere else other than where one is (that is "here") and the present tense suggests that the time is "now" without it being said. Sometimes less is more and showing is better than telling. When I edit my works I generally cut fat from the wording as much as possible to give greater strength to my descriptions by presenting them succinctly. Redundancies seem to devalue the original intent in my opinion. All that aside, the sentiment expressed was lovely and I enjoyed the read.

[Lisasview]

Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and for explaining your thoughts about my poem..I actually woke up one morning and just wrote this out and it pretty much is exactly as I wrote it...
I do have a tendency to personalise my writings and that I am working to stop that.
And, I do have trouble with my tenses... With absolutely no education in poetry, although I have been writing for a very long time, I am not always proficient in how I say things..This poem does have a syllable count... so you are correct in saying that I needed a word to make it work...I do go over what I write and leave out what I feel I do not need..
You are right showing is far better than telling Fabian...This poem is about my death..
I am going to see if I can change it a bit but still keep the correct amount of syllables..
Sorry, I am just rambling on... Did you read NYMPH? I think you might like it..
Lisa

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It reminded me of a passage from Song of Solomon, "Love is strong as death"....it's a wonderfully romantic notion and observation. Shall we be reunited with our loved ones, families, friends? It's my sincerest hope that it should be so. Blessings, F.

[Lisasview]

Glad you understood my poem Fabian.
Lisa, cleaning my artroom...all day job!

[Fran Marie]

A most Beautifully rendered poem
both in form and content your words
blend nicely with the chose image
also liked the ending couplet in this
lovely sonnet..very well penned

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Fran Marie for reading and reviewing and most importantly enjoying my little poem!!
Lisa, now in Spain

[Fran Marie]

you're most welcome🌷

[Nima.Hope]

Poems with connections to flowers always fascinate me so much. The rhyming was so joyful to me cause these days most poets do not care about ryhme.
Thanks for sharing it.
Best Wishes
Nima

[Lisasview]

Hi Nima, I am so happy that you read and reviewed my poem... I like poetic structure and rhyming and so I appreciate it that you too like that.
You will see that all my poems have rhymes...some are Sonnets..I too love flowers in a poem......
If you like you might enjoy Mothers Letter to Hand~In~Hand...there are more....
Thank you again,
Lisa,now in Spain

[Nima.Hope]

Thanks Lisa, I really appreciate poets like you,because the ultimate level of poetry in my view, is to keep the balance between rhyme and the main subject,which you have nailed it.
You're Welcome
Best Wishes

[Lisasview]

Wow, thank you Nima your review means a lot to me because this is exactly how I feel.
Lisa, 7am in Spain

[Nima.Hope]

You're welcome .My pleasure.

[Jibey]

This is a romantic poem, written with that dreamy sense of passion and surrender that can come from a woman's heart. 'Naked'... 'I surrender'.. 'Kissing your salty neck'.. Even 'Forevermore' is a romantic fantasy. But the words flow with smooth and soothing pleasure, caressing the reader and lifting us from the harsh world of reality to the delight that ought to be. I hope your muse, like your love for him, will never wane.

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh dear Jibey... I too hope my muse will never wane... I am about to put on another poem that you might enjoy... Nymph
Thank you for reading and reviewing...so few out there ever do...
Lisa

[Jibey]

It was a pleasure, Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

It has beauty. It has class. It has the classic feel. The journey of forevermore starts now. Your style is music to the ears. You are really soaring in love and poetry.

[Lisasview]

Wow, what a lovely thing to say dear Sami..
Thank you so much,
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. I felt it. You are welcome Lisa in Spain.

[Lisasview]

Thank you,
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

::::: )))))))))))))))

[Andrew John]

I see so few Shakespearian sonnets. Pleasure, this one. Lovely place to have softly meeting eyes. So thank you, Lisasview.

[Lisasview]

So very nice to know you enjoyed my Rhyming Quatrain..not really quite a Sonnet... I did actually write a couple of Sonnets for example... Hand~In~Hand that you might like... It was the very first one I ever posted in my life for others to read.
Lisa, now in Spain

[redzone]

a soft and deeply touching love poem Lisa, kudos....

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much...This is about thoughts of my own death...Weird but true..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

There's so much passion in this writing. We hid in deep-sea dark caves..." that line and everything to follow was so well chained together. Wonderfully explained and expressed poem. tyfs

[Lisasview]

Hi Cyprian,
I just noticed that I never thanked you for your lovely review... I really thought I had..so weird..
I feel very passionate about what I write...
This one was about thoughts of my own death... Not sure you read Innocence... quite different from anything I have ever written..
Lisa, on the computer in Spain

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome. Sorry for the late reply. I'm not on here that often.

Different is good. :)

[Lisasview]

I definitely believe that being different is good...
Lisa, quite early in Spain

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa,

Having lost my wife of 49 years this past January, a beautiful girl and woman I had met and loved since she was 15 years old, this piece of your heart set to pen of page speaks to me in ways that I cannot voice, nor express, for the pain remains fresh as though I saw her dying just yesterday ... All I can say is that this poem is poignant and reaches right to my heart in its beauty and expression of undying love ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Good morning dear Marvin,
Just up 6:30 here in Spain...and, reading your review..first one today. I am in tears as I feel your loss so deeply.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. Hope you will read more of mine... I think you might like Forever...similar title..but different..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Lisasview]

Marvin,
I just read your review to my husband and he too was moved deeply by your words...he got chills ...like me...We are so saddened by your loss...
Thinking of you,
Lisa

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham]

Thank you so much, both you and your husband ...

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome