Agony

Remembering the emotional pain i suffered with someone I loved years ago ... Rhyming Quatrain and Couplet

     A g o n y . . . 

Agony-deep pain, as you slam the door.

Cries do not help as I ponder, "What more?"

I care that you've left without a resolve ...

yet, knowing tomorrow this will dissolve.

Oh, the hurt is too hard for me to bear ...

wanting to escape, but also to share.

Hard feelings erupted into a fight,

trying now to make things perfectly right.

But, the door is slammed, you'll likely be gone.

Hopes for our love are all surely withdrawn.

Author's Note

Hope when you read this that you will take the time to review...
I always review what I read.
Thank you,
Lisa, now in Spain

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

Slamming a door is not a good sign... I hate to see fights between people who love each other... and like to seem them resolved before nightfall... but it doesn't always work that way. In this piece, a woman is left in torment, agonized by the way he left, probably knowing he will not return...and therefore perhaps all hope is gone. Nicely written Lisa...
Best, B.

[Lisasview]

Oh yes Betty, this is the pain I suffered when i was quite young by a love (married to!!) that betrayed me...I learned from that... but remember the pain quite well.
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome!
Best, B

[JMaster1]

How can I read your words without letting you know that you are the best
You know how to express every feeling , emotions and turned them into a true poetry

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
I am going over all my reviews for all my poems, quite a task... and, I found this wonderful review you left.
I do remember reading your review and I was sure I had responded ..but, alas I never did...I think I forgot to press the Post Comment after I wrote to you...Sorry for that...To say what you said inspires me to write more..I recently posted three new poems Guardian of Memories, Luscious and Nymph..which I think you might like.. Not sure if you have read these.. Plus I have three more I plan to post soon...
Thank you again,
Lisa, working on my computer in Spain

[R J Askew]

It was the jagged title that drew my eye. I am a stranger to those door slamming moments and the agony you describe. This means I have not lived the full range of emotions. Is it a loss not to have known such agony? Phps we need to be able to feel agony to be able to fully feel its opposite. I don't know.

[Lisasview]

Oh goodness RJ,
I am going through all my poems just to make sure I have responded to all my reviews... And, I found this wonderful ~ insightful review of yours.. which I did read several weeks ago and was so sure I had responded to... But, alas I probably wrote it but never pressed send...So I am sorry for that..So, this is a belated thank you!!!
Lisa, checking things out on my reviews...

[R J Askew]

Arf, arf...i'm far worse...it sometimes takes me years to notice things. I wish I was more responsive at times. Chrz.

[Lisasview]

I am catching it now before it gets more out of hand... I actually have a book with the name of each poem at the top and I have kept track of everyone that has reviewed..Call me crazy....
Lisa

[R J Askew]

That is a form of craziness I used to aspire to.

[Martin Addison]

The emotions the tone of this poem portrays feels very real and that makes your piece very authentic. I love the touch of rhymes and the sense the lines make. It's not so easy to lose the people you genuinely love. Great work. It's pregnant with more lines though.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem... Each line ends with a rhyme. The are 10 syllables per line.
I do not understand when you say "It's pregnant with more lines though" What does that mean?
Lisa, 6pm in Spain

[Martin Addison]

I meant you can actually expand or add more lines if you want. Thanks

[Lisasview]

Hi,
I feel the ending is very clear and that no more needs to be said.
Thank you

[Aura]

The slamming of the door is a signal. It is over. Sometimes those hard feelings just cant be brushed aside, and if tjose are left unmentioned, the relationship if, prolonged will create a very uncomfortable relationship, like there is always an elephant in the room. Agony that the relationship ended, but probably for the best. I enjoyed reading this!

[Lisasview]

Yes, this was for the bes!
So glad you understood the true meaning of my poem Aura.
Lisa

[Aura]

Glad to have read it!

[Lisasview]

That is fabulous.. I wrote quite a few poems way back when and then many new ones..
I think you might like Cry or Time
Lisa, about to have dinner in Spain

[Aura]

I'll have a look at that one! What's the time in Spain?

[Lisasview]

It is now 7:30 in Spain..
Thank you..
Lisa

[Aura]

Wow okay thanks!

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome
Lisa 6:30am

[Temperance]

How often we have been in the same situation and the pain is...Agony! Nicely done but, oh..so sad. Thank you for sharing Ms. Lisa. Hope there are happier days ahead!

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
This was where my heart was many many years ago. My life changed 40 years ago and has been rather wonderful ever since!
Lisa

[Temperance]

I’m so happy for you!

[Lisasview]

Thank you!!!

[Neville]

perfectly aligned so no worries on that score .... a sad poem sadly enjoyed .. and I am sure many will be able to relate .. Neville just setting of now for w

[Lisasview]

Thank you so very much..The bottom line was off to the left... but somehow corrected itself by the time you read my poem.. I do appreciate that you read my request.. I believe that many people skim through poems and descriptions.. I can usually tell by the way they review.. and I find this so sad.
I also love that you have sort of picked up on a little game between us.. regarding what we are doing, the time and so on..such fun..
Yours ended with waiting for the w...
was that meant to be or was there suppose to be more?

Lisa, almost time for dinner..gambas on the barbecue..

[Neville]

my pleasure, it was meant to read Washford to Bishops Lydeard Station on the old steam train as I am working a couple of days in Taunton ..
Neville just about to settle down with a glass of red ................ :)

[Lisasview]

Isn't this grand.. I just finished a nice gin and tonic and now we are off to see Ozark...great series!!
so Lisa, about to watch Ozark

[andrew mitchell]

So well written Lisa, lovely rhythmic flow and the topic is of anger and sadness. A slamming of the door is symbolic of either needing space to think and to be apart for now until all cools or more dramatic this is the final curtain.

[Lisasview]

H there, this was the final curtain.. I was in my early 20's...1970's ...
Glad you picked up on the true meaning on my poem..
Thank you for your review,
Appreciate it... Lisa about to have gammas for dinner...yum...

[lightsong]

"What more?" yes... this two words said it all, it is like... whatever comes next, there is no more pain that I will feel since I felt it all, many times in your poem comes a word, line, or sentence that stand up for me speaking in a deeper level. as for the editing and submitting your poems here, the site can be confusing and really difficult to deal with at times, when You edit a poem, the whole font style goes... my advice is to write on Microsoft Word then copy and past it to the site. hope that can help You my dear. do take care of yourself there❤️

[lightsong]

try to specify only the last line not the whole poem and press the center button, I think it will work.

[Chris Shaw]

When that door is slammed and you know it's unlikely to reopen is a painful place to be. Many a tear has been shed in a situation like this. Emotion conveyed well here.

The word withdrawn is appearing to the left on my screen Lisa. From what you have mentioned, you were hoping for it to be centralised.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Good morning Chris,
Thank you for your review and for letting me know about my last line... It is perfect on manage but comes out wrong on my submitted version.
So weird..Ah well..
Lisa, looks like we might have a second day of sun!!

[Lisasview]

Hi Chris,
Neville wrote to say that my poem is aligned... so weird that it got straighten out units own!!
Lisa, nice and sunny.. 7:30pm

[Chris Shaw]

Checked it out Lisa. It appears to have sorted itself out now. Pleased you have nice sunny weather :)