Agony

Remembering the emotional pain i suffered with someone I loved years ago ... Rhyming Quatrain and Couplet

     A g o n y . . . 

Agony-deep pain, as you slam the door.

Cries do not help as I ponder, "What more?"

I care that you've left without a resolve ...

yet, knowing tomorrow this will dissolve.

Oh, the hurt is too hard for me to bear ...

wanting to escape, but also to share.

Hard feelings erupted into a fight,

trying now to make things perfectly right.

But, the door is slammed, you'll likely be gone.

Hopes for our love are all surely withdrawn.

Author's Note

Hope when you read this that you will take the time to review...
I always review what I read.
Thank you,
Lisa, now in Spain

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

Slamming a door is not a good sign... I hate to see fights between people who love each other... and like to seem them resolved before nightfall... but it doesn't always work that way. In this piece, a woman is left in torment, agonized by the way he left, probably knowing he will not return...and therefore perhaps all hope is gone. Nicely written Lisa...
Best, B.

[Lisasview]

Oh yes Betty, this is the pain I suffered when i was quite young by a love (married to!!) that betrayed me...I learned from that... but remember the pain quite well.
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome!
Best, B

[Sami Khalil]

Live and learn, even in the US or Spain. Too young to understand then grown to see the big picture.
A fine but sad poem.

[Lisasview]

YES, the big picture...for sure...
Thank you,
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are welcome 😊

[Lisasview]

I just posted another new poem ( I recently posted 4 others) anyway this one is called MODEL and it is about my dear mother... I think you might like it...
Lisa

[Matthew Kult]

Poetically agonizing, creatively sad.

Great read

With love

Matthew

[Lisasview]

Such kind words dear Matthew,
Lisa

[noddingoff]

Don't you love her madly?
This is a great poem, I can see it playing like a film in my head

[Lisasview]

I can not believe that I neglected to thank you for your wonderful and thoughtful review...9months ago...
So a belated thank you,
Lisa

[Nameless]

A poem full of feelings. I can't imagine this happening to me. Great work Lisa.

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Thank you for reading and reviewing. I wrote this poem many years ago. I was quite young. Luckily for me I learned from terrible experience and it has never happened again...
Lisa, now in Spain

[Stuart Munro]

Doors are always involved , I blame door makers , if we had no doors , all Slamming would stop
As usual Beautiful artwork , I wish I could do artwork , you meet someone then two brains cause an emotional bomb , to late to resolve , the damage has been done ,

[Lisasview]

You are so right... This occurs when we are young ... way more than when we are older..
Yes, let's get rid of those darn doors..
I am so happy to know you like the image ...
I spend so much time picking what I feel is the perfect image to represent what I am feeling in my poem..Did you read my poem CRY?? If not I do think you will like it.
Lisa

[Stuart Munro]

Lisa , I don’t know how you do artwork , I expect your a paid member , unlike me in the free zone lol
I will look at Cry

[Lisasview]

What do you mean?
I am not a paid member.I did not know there was such a thing...
All you need to do is find an image you feel is right and put it on your computer. Then go to where you add your poem (this is where you can change the font, color, etc. and, at the same area there is something that says image..click and add your image.
Easy..
Lisa

[Stuart Munro]

Lol, Sorry , I don’t know much about this site ,
Oh it’s that easy , it’s I just add a photo usually
Thanks Lisa ,

[Lisasview]

Well, so you know how to add a photo...so you will have no issue adding an image.
Look at Pinterest for images..
Download onto your computer...Resize if need be and Voila you are done.
I spend hours adding an image...and, color to my text..I make sure that the image is in the exact right place.
That my text is in the exact right place.
I look at each of my poems as a piece of art and the image and text are essential to representing my poem. But that is just me.. and, believe me I am no wiz on the computer..Learning as I go...
L

[Stuart Munro]

Thanks Lisa , I’m not much good at computers lol,
Thanks for your help , will have an attempt

[Lisasview]

Sounds good...
Lisa

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Those door slamming fights... I couldn’t think of a better fitting name than ‘Agony’. You capture the feeling and the darkness of being left alone in the dark after a shouting match perfectly. Maybe that’s too specific, but many of us have gone through it. And then ‘oh, that hurt is too hard for me to bear, wanting to escape but also to share,’ this is also such a relatable feeling, you long to run back to the person who hurt you because they’re who you talk to when you’re hurt. Thank you so much for sharing this gorgeous, intense poem!

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh Cat how did your fabulous intense~ review slip by me... I can not believe it because I check my reviews daily and respond immediately.. Then, all of a sudden your great review of
a month ago showed up... So~ so weird.
I am glad you relate.... yes, I do believe so may of us have been through this Agony!!
I so appreciate your review... I can tell from your words that you are really connected..
Lisa, in Spain

[SM]

Just read this... I know this feeling... Sometimes still happens in my life. Sometimes the knowing that this will 'dissolve' tomorrow is taken for granted.... As always.... love this piece of work

[Lisasview]

Thank you again for taking the time to read and review my poem sM
Lisa, late in Spain

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa,

A lover's quarrel always leaves one to wonder, to fear, whether such a held a precious relationship has come to and, is now over, or shall ever be the same again ... One who does not feel the emotions of these thoughts is truly in danger of allowing love to die right before their eyes ... And yet, it is that fear, that wondering, those doubts which ignite the spark of romantic flames when, in due time, the makeup resulting from the breakup, rage and soar once more as though the fuss, the fight, the quarrel had never happened in the first place, and, in most cases, always tends to make that relationship with our significant other stronger than before, stronger than ever, as it has withstood and endured the test of adversity and time ... Beautifully done ...!

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Good morning Marvin,
I am going through all my reviews for each of my poems to make sure I have responded to each and everyone... Just found your wonderful review for Agony, and, I am so surprised that I do not see my response... I remember writing it last week... but I must have not pressed on send...I really love your review and appreciate that you took the time to leave such lovely thoughts. You are right.. When there is a quarrel the relationship could die right then.. But if one communicates and "fights fair" then the relationship will be even stronger than before.. Communication is always the key..
Thank you so very much,
Lisa, going through my reviews..