Dreams

This is another poem I wrote in 1970 .. Art courtesy of Pinterest Parabolic Quatrains

  

   Dreams

Finding you

   on long walks,

     endless travels,

       through dreams

         of

          deserted dreamlands.

          I fling back

          the dark night,

          finding you waiting for me;

         naked, arms open.

        Time …

       becomes but a moment, 

     a dream;

   then, I fall back

to reality.

Author's Note

If you have read my poem I would really appreciate a review.
I always review everything I read.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

A delightful poem of flowing dreams, and gently swaying lines to show us what many of us dream about because it is so upbeat and romantic...then unfortunately we awaken to reality with a shock and disappointment that in fact, it was not authentic....back to sleep!!!
Lovely, Lisa
Warmly, B

[Lisasview]

Ha ha Betty,
Yes, what you say is so very true...
Lisa

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Lisa
Warmly, B

[Rachel Fitzgerald-Feele..]

Hi Lisa, great that you have kept and shared your earlier pieces. For me, this reads as if the mind is consumed by / searching for a love, constantly thinking and dreaming of them ✨️

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Yes, I probably was searching for love...that is for sure!
Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem...
Did you happen to read the extensive review E.P. wrote...So detailed...I think you will enjoy it.
Lisa

[Rachel Fitzgerald-Feeley]

Oh I read it Lisa, very in depth, as is the one from Bhuyanshe Talukdar. Well done on writing such worthy pieces 😊

[Lisasview]

They are both fantastic reviewers...
I am so lucky..
Plus, of course your lovely reviews!!

[E.P. Robles]

The poem you've shared appears to be a short and evocative piece that explores themes of longing, dreams, and the fleeting nature of time. Let's break down its elements:

The Title: "Dreams" - The title suggests that the poem will revolve around the concept of dreams, which can often be symbolic or metaphorical in poetry.

The Content: Finding You on Long Walks: This line sets the tone for the poem. It implies a search or a journey, possibly through life or one's inner thoughts and emotions.

Endless Travels: The idea of "endless travels" adds a sense of vastness and perhaps a feeling of being lost or adrift in life's journey.

Through Dreams of Deserted Dreamlands: This line introduces the concept of dreams within dreams, a layered and surreal aspect that can often be found in poetry. "Deserted dreamlands" suggests a sense of abandonment or solitude within these dreams.

I Fling Back the Dark Night: This could symbolize a moment of clarity or awakening, where the darkness (symbolic of confusion or uncertainty) is pushed away, revealing something hidden or desired.

Finding You Waiting for Me; Naked, Arms Open: This is a powerful image of finding someone or something in a vulnerable and open state. It can represent the idea of finding a deep connection or understanding.

Time... Becomes but a Moment, a Dream: This line highlights the ephemeral nature of time. When one is lost in a meaningful moment or dream, it can feel like time passes quickly, almost as if it's not real.

Then, I Fall Back to Reality: The poem ends with a return to reality, suggesting that the dream or moment was transient. It's a common theme in poetry to explore the contrast between the dream world and reality.

Overall, this poem seems to convey the idea of a fleeting, almost otherworldly encounter or connection in the midst of life's journeys and dreams. It touches on themes of longing, the passage of time, and the contrast between the dream world and the harsher realities of life. The imagery and metaphors used create a sense of depth and emotion in a relatively short piece.

[Lisasview]

I am always blown away by your amazing reviews.
If I ever publish anything I know your review would be fantastic as it represents the way I felt when I wrote this poem and all the others you have reviewed.
However, it would be difficult for me to write such a spendid ~ insightful review of my own work.
Thank you so much!!
Lisa

[E.P. Robles]

You are so welcomed. I’m studied your poem and so glad you found it on mark! 🌷

[Lisasview]

Yes, I see that all the poems that you have reviewed of mine are always on the mark!
I am so appreciative!
Lisa

[E.P. Robles]

I have 8 books of poetry yet to be published. I am not sure about when I will publish. Thank you for the very kind words.

[Lisasview]

I wish I knew the best way to send a poem or two to a publisher... I need to figure it out...
Wow, 8 books of poetry!!! Amazing. I have 61 poems posted so far... Just posted a new Sonnet...You might like it?
Lisa

[E.P. Robles]

Let me look. :)

[Lisasview]

Okay..thank you...

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

This is a beautiful and romantic poem that captures the sense of longing and desire that can accompany the search for love. The lines "Finding you / on long walks, / endless travels, / through dreams / of / deserted dreamlands" create a sense of adventure and exploration, as the speaker searches for their soulmate.

The imagery of the speaker flinging back the dark night to find their lover waiting for them is particularly powerful, creating a sense of magic and wonder that is sure to resonate with readers. The line "naked, arms open" adds a sensual element to the poem, highlighting the physical and emotional connection between the two lovers.

Overall, this is a beautiful and moving poem that captures the thrill and excitement of finding true love. The author's use of imagery and language is masterful, creating a sense of wonder and awe that is sure to inspire readers to keep searching for their own soulmate.

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
You are an amazing reviewer!!! If I ever write a book I would want you to be a reviewer.
Did you realise that I wrote this in 1970 when I was in my early 20's?
I am so glad I kept it....on plain paper and written in pencil...
Lisa, now in Spain

[Temperance]

If only our dream world was reality! This is a lovely, easy flow poem, Ms. Lisa, that I truly enjoyed. I loved the curved format of presentation. Adds another dimension to it. Thank you for re-sharing with us. Temp

[Lisasview]

Hi Temp,
Did you mean Re~sharing because I wrote this in 1970??? If so...I never shared any of my words until this year..All my poems were keep in a book..tucked away.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.. I so appreciate it.
Lisa

[Temperance]

I thought that when you wrote it you shared it at time so, this post would be a re-share but, not necessarily with the cafe.

[Lisasview]

No, the truth is that I just wrote poetry since I was 10 years old and actually kept it all...stashed away... and ,then when I was down with Covid last January i decided to see if perhaps there was a place I could post some of my poems...And, when I looked.. I saw Writers Cafe and really liked the name and posted my first poem (that turned out to be a Sonnet) Hand~In~Hand... and, after that began posting old and new poems..I have never had any training in poetry writing...but now I am studying like crazy...
I love it...
Thank you for your interest dearest Temp.
Lisa, in Galicia

[Temperance]

You sound like me! Some of what I have posted for the first time was written back in the 80’s. I stand corrected and, I still love this poem. I have never had any training either and have found this site to be a great training ground and introduction to new forms of poetry. I truly enjoy reading your work, Lisa. Temp

[Lisasview]

What a doll you are Temp... to allow me into your life..a little... You must be quite bit younger than me as I was 22 years old when I wrote this little poem.
Yes, this site has helped me learn so much...Isn't it wonderful!
And to say you truly enjoy reading my words is so very nice and inspiring.
Lisa, visiting Galicia, Spain

[Temperance]

I’m guessing I’m about 2 years younger than you so…we’re in the same age group. 😂

[Lisasview]

Are you? I am now as of Feb 6 74 years old... You just seemed young to me...Luck
y for me I am extremely healthy..no health issues so not meds..

[Temperance]

Yep! You are so lucky you are in good health!

[Lisasview]

I have always been aware of my health...exercise and eating the right things...and, trying my best to have a happy fulfilling life. By the way I just now posted a new Sonnet, which you might like?
Lisa

[Neville]

this is indeed, really quite lovely Lisa .. I don't know how or why, I never stumbled upon it before :)

Neville

[Lisasview]

Hi Neville,
There are probably a few you have not read of mine and I am quite delighted that you found this older one of mine.
Thank you for saying it is lovely..so kind of you,
Lisa. in Galicia, Spain

[Neville]

you are most welcome Lisa, my pleasure entirely :)

[Red Brick Keshner]

When time stands still, it's something we pay attention to. Loved the opening, a wonderful walk and all that it entails. A dreamy journey from a splendid (crescent) shape poem. Thanks for having shared. Frederick.

[Lisasview]

Hi Freds,
This is so strange,
Someone just read my little poem and when I was writing a thank you I found your wonderful and so appreciated review..which you wrote two months ago! I always appreciate reviews and pride myself on my quick response.. So as I said I find it strange that I did not see your review?
Sorry about that..
Thanks again,
Lisa, in Galicia, Spain

[Red Brick Keshner]

Quite all right, dear Lisa. Summer has a way with the spirit quite unique to the other seasons.

[Ana B.]

Wow, this has a very airy, flowy magical feeling to it when reading. Love your style! A perfect write, reminding me of magical lands and sands of time. Lovely writing

[Lisasview]

Such a lovely thing to say dear Ana
I wrote this in 1970...
I was 22 years old...
read moreSuch a lovely thing to say dear Ana
I wrote this in 1970...
I was 22 years old...
Thank you for reviewing my work,
Lisa

[Susan 🦋]

Such are the ways of dreamlands. To wish away the breaking dawn, sigh… A tender read, perfectly illustrated.Well done.🌙

[Lisasview]

Sorry for the delay in responding dear Susan..
Life has a way of getting in the way...
Thank you for reviewing my work,
Lisa

[Susan 🦋]

No worries! I know how that goes...