Her Lips

Her Lips

A Poem by Lisasview
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Unrhymed Quatrains in 8-count

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     Her Lips 


       Full, blazing-red, sun-colored lips 

       kissed my neck; heat down my body.

     ’Twas then I knew that I was hers …

       forever bonded ~ by that kiss.

    ~~

       Longing for nights spent together,

       hair tucked softly ’gainst my shoulder,

       long, silky legs entwining mine …

       still, red lips burning all night thru.

            ~~

       With woken eyes, our dream ended;

       reaching to find her body gone …

       teardrops fell quick from saddened eyes

       her red lips now but memory.


                    ~~


      

© 2023 Lisasview


Author's Note

Lisasview
If you happen to pass by and read my poem please take the time to leave a review.
I always review whatever I read.
Thank you,
Lisa

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Definitely written from a man's perspective. Perhaps you are leaning too heavily on someone for an edit? It takes away from the originality of the poem. Especially when most 'editors' are overated. Except in their own minds. Otherwise you have hit your sensual peaks. Erotica, in whatever context, may not be everyone's cup of tea, though. May explain the lack of comments here.

Posted 2 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Well, to begin with the lack of comments is probably because I only submitted my poem yesterday. I f.. read more
;)

2 Years Ago

Two days since posted...lack of comments is either laziness as you suggest, or uninspiring content, .. read more
Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Okay, I get it
But did you read any of my non sensual poems.
Totally different



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Hi again Lisa, I've read a few of your poems a couple of times over and haven't left a review because they really do make you think before reviewing and are worthy of more than a quick, basic comment. This again is nicely put together. It makes me wonder whether she has just left before he woke or maybe she is gone forever. Sparks the imagination.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Helol again,
I am thrilled that you are spending time to analyse my poems. This one and anot.. read more
Rachel Fitzgerald-Feeley

1 Year Ago

Hi Lisa, I'll go read those ones now 😊
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

I see you read Innocence... Thank you...
Lisa
it is difficult to explore the world of human contact from the perspective of the gender we are born with but to try to approach the most intimate of human contact from an emotional position we have never experienced takes some courage.. it gives whole new meaning to "walk a mile in my shoes" and yes.. we do all experience the same emotions but we are also unique in how we "feel" it..

Posted 2 Years Ago


Lisasview

2 Years Ago

You are so spot on my dearest Olla... exactly..
I have no idea where this came form but truly.. read more
A lovely sensual poem Lisa
written from a male perspective
a mild erotic piece done in good
taste..i much enjoyed..

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

2 Years Ago

For some strange reason I forgot to say thank you Fran Marie for your kind review...goodness 5 mont.. read more
I don't typically read poetry, but this poem was very well done. It was very effective in that it really took you to that place, you can really feel the emotion and the longing from it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Good morning Didi,
So nice to wake up this morning to you very nice review.
Interestin.. read more
DidIWriteThat

2 Years Ago

I think I used the websites Discover feature. I'm a new writer, so it's helpful and inspiring for .. read more
Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Thank you
I appreciate it.
Lisa
"The Kiss" is something very special, the seal of love. I love that You wrote with a mans' tongue I like reading poems written from the other genders' perspective, it needs enough awareness to feel their own feelings. your poem is really passionate and never thought I will read this sad ending still it shows what I was telling at the beginning here how the kiss is something deep and special.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Hello my dearest,
It appears that i never thanked you for your wonderful heartfelt review!! I.. read more
lightsong

2 Years Ago

Hi my dear 🌷

Never worry about such things~ sending You bright wishes and Hugs*
The warmth of a Kiss when Moonbeams reach the place where dreams are kept... tenderly, pat

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Thank you for you loving review...
My best to you and your family...
Lisa
The first stanza alone could make it a poem all on its own!
The rest, like warmed caramel pouring over the vanilla curves of the remaining verses. The ambience of the poem could easily be switched to that of a woman's point of view, and the poem would still be as strong with just a minor change of the sex noted in the last stanza. This poem is just provocative.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Good morning,
Wow, thank you for your positive review...I have gotten several mixed reviews.... read more
Lisa, I have read some of your other sensuous poems, and I just read this one! Girl, I am not just saying this, but your sensuous poems are becoming my favorite to read! I love your style!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Hi Kathy,
I am no sure why I never responded to your wonderful review..I remember reading it... read more
KATHY SUE SILLS

2 Years Ago

My pleasure!
This is beautiful, but sad! Memories of love that's gone. It's simple, so sensual! I loved it!!!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

KAREN

2 Years Ago

You're very welcome!!
Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Did you read my newest one?
Thirst For Love
Lisa
KAREN

2 Years Ago

Not yet! will read it!!
Stunning work, Lady Lisa 🍷

And, how thoughtful of you to pen one for the bards to appreciate and vicariously join-in with your fertile imagination … goes to show just how sensually in-tune you are with the male psyche.
Your beautiful Unrhymed Quatrains, in spot-on 8-count lines, produce a smooth, spellbinding flow from first to final word … a fine master's mark, if ever there was. Picture … mmm! And, the presentation is sheer eye candy.
Makes me wonder why I never wrote about her unforgettable … er, "red lips."

Swept … thank you for such a sweet treat, Lisa ⁓ Richard🖌

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Wow, what wonderful praise to get from my effort.
Especially after reading the first review o.. read more
Richard🖌

2 Years Ago

For my review, you're welcome, Lisa. : )
i cannot account for any other's.
Lisasview

2 Years Ago

Of course I was just saying...

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Added on March 16, 2022
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Lisasview
Lisasview

Benitachell, Alicante, Spain



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